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Ohme
Senior Member

since 1999-07-17

Posts 816
Texas

0 posted 1999-11-01 03:26 PM

The Greater Gift

Why did God so bless the world
to place upon it, man?
Was it just an after thought
He added to his plan?

I think He made a perfect Earth
and painted skies so blue,
then created man to have
some one to give it to.

But man must count his life in years
Earth, countless centuries.
Man needs no further time to heal
from damage done by trees.

Seems the greater gift was giving
Earth a longer span.
And maybe it could heal
from wounds inflicted by the man.

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I look forward to tomorrow, while looking back on the past. But today is the day I am living. And I expect it to be a great day!

Munda
Member Elite

since 1999-10-08

Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands

1 posted 1999-11-01 03:49 PM

I truly hope Earth will heal. As usual your poem makes me think for a moment. : ) Thanks. Lovely poem.

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

2 posted 1999-11-01 04:11 PM

Omhe,
I liked the poem but I think the third stanza could use some work.

Ohme
Senior Member

since 1999-07-17

Posts 816
Texas

3 posted 1999-11-01 04:22 PM

Thanks, Munda.

And thanks to you Seymour. I was not really happy with 3rd either. Just couldn't seem to come up with anything I liked better. Will work on it some.

tori
Senior Member

since 1999-06-18

Posts 520
Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA

4 posted 1999-11-01 04:56 PM

Great Subject matter here ohme.. you did it well..

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

5 posted 1999-11-01 05:06 PM

Great piece, I wish everyone thought this way, then we probably wouldn't have had to heal the Earth in the first place!

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Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Every man goes down to his death bearing in his hands only that which he has given away...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)

Watcher666
Senior Member

since 1999-10-13

Posts 1606

6 posted 1999-11-02 04:34 AM

Liked the message here. Well done!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

JennyLee
Senior Member

since 1999-09-01

Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.

7 posted 1999-11-02 09:02 AM

I enjoyed very much!!

jenny

Ohme
Senior Member

since 1999-07-17

Posts 816
Texas

8 posted 1999-11-02 09:15 AM

Seymour, been thinking about it. I think it would have a better punch if I just left out the 3rd completely. What do you think about that?

Thanks Tori, Isis, Watcher and Jenny.
I have probably left more of a mark on the Earth than I ever intended.

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

9 posted 1999-11-02 09:29 AM

Nicely written

WhtDove
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-22

Posts 9245
Illinois

10 posted 1999-11-02 10:59 AM

Great thought here Ohme. Forgive me if I can't come up with scripture as of right now, but it does state that it will be rejuvinated. This is where our home will be in Eternity. He created it to be inhabited! loved your poem!

If I can find a better place than this I will let you know. Read Rev. 21:1-3

[This message has been edited by WhtDove (edited 11-02-1999).]

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

11 posted 2004-04-25 10:29 PM

I think it's great how it is!

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