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The Greater Gift

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Ohme
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0 posted 11-01-1999 03:26 PM       View Profile for Ohme   Email Ohme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Ohme

The Greater Gift

Why did God so bless the world
to place upon it, man?
Was it just an after thought
He added to his plan?

I think He made a perfect Earth
and painted skies so blue,
then created man to have
some one to give it to.

But man must count his life in years
Earth, countless centuries.
Man needs no further time to heal
from damage done by trees.

Seems the greater gift was giving
Earth a longer span.
And maybe it could heal
from wounds inflicted by the man.

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I look forward to tomorrow, while looking back on the past. But today is the day I am living. And I expect it to be a great day!
© Copyright 1999 Lorene Meadows - All Rights Reserved
Munda
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1 posted 11-01-1999 03:49 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

I truly hope Earth will heal. As usual your poem makes me think for a moment. : ) Thanks. Lovely poem.

Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 11-01-1999 04:11 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Omhe,
I liked the poem but I think the third stanza could use some work.
Ohme
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3 posted 11-01-1999 04:22 PM       View Profile for Ohme   Email Ohme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ohme

Thanks, Munda.

And thanks to you Seymour. I was not really happy with 3rd either. Just couldn't seem to come up with anything I liked better. Will work on it some.
tori
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4 posted 11-01-1999 04:56 PM       View Profile for tori   Email tori   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tori's Home Page   View IP for tori

Great Subject matter here ohme.. you did it well..
Isis
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5 posted 11-01-1999 05:06 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Great piece, I wish everyone thought this way, then we probably wouldn't have had to heal the Earth in the first place!

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Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Every man goes down to his death bearing in his hands only that which he has given away...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


Watcher666
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6 posted 11-02-1999 04:34 AM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Liked the message here. Well done!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
JennyLee
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I enjoyed very much!!

jenny
Ohme
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8 posted 11-02-1999 09:15 AM       View Profile for Ohme   Email Ohme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ohme


Seymour, been thinking about it. I think it would have a better punch if I just left out the 3rd completely. What do you think about that?

Thanks Tori, Isis, Watcher and Jenny.
I have probably left more of a mark on the Earth than I ever intended.
hoot_owl_rn
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Nicely written
WhtDove
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10 posted 11-02-1999 10:59 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Great thought here Ohme. Forgive me if I can't come up with scripture as of right now, but it does state that it will be rejuvinated. This is where our home will be in Eternity. He created it to be inhabited! loved your poem!

If I can find a better place than this I will let you know. Read Rev. 21:1-3

[This message has been edited by WhtDove (edited 11-02-1999).]
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I think it's great how it is!
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