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Mr. Robot

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suthern
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0 posted 11-01-1999 07:37 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for suthern

With apologies to Mr. Sandman. *G*

Oh, Mr. Robot, lend me a trick
I need to understand just what makes you tick.
How do you stand there, so unfeeling
When every day sets my senses reeling?
Mr. Robot - Oh, where were you
When I stood hand in hand and said "I do"
To someone that I so trusted?
Too darn bad that he was so disgusted.
Mr. Robot, I sure could have used
Your fortitude when I was abused...
Who's that creature there in the corner?
Why didn't anyone bother to warn her?
Mr. Robot, I just couldn't learn.
I kept loving and kept getting burned.
In a meeting, facing the snickers
Surely there most be some death quicker
Than knowing the love of your life
Early last week took him a wife...
I willed myself to a vacant stare
But how I wanted to just not care!
Oh Mr. Robot, you do look so kind.
Please explain, if you wouldn't mind
How I can escape from this hell?
Mr. Robot, lend me your shell!
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LJA'sLorelei54
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1 posted 11-01-1999 07:49 AM       View Profile for LJA'sLorelei54   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LJA'sLorelei54

torn between telling you how creative you are and how your heart must have been feeling...so I will tell you both! Any news on a trip yet? anxiously awaiting...
hoot_owl_rn
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2 posted 11-01-1999 09:01 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Wow....this was very creative
suthern
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3 posted 11-01-1999 10:01 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Lor & Hoot: I hope creative is good? LOL. Thanks for reading.

Lor: Would it destroy all your illusions to know that this was born while I was taking a bubble bath, singing that ole 40's tune Mr. Sandman to myself? Self-preservation is powerful... I think my mind devised this poem to quieten the noise! *G*
LJA'sLorelei54
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4 posted 11-01-1999 10:46 AM       View Profile for LJA'sLorelei54   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LJA'sLorelei54

Creative is good!

I too sing to myself and LJA smiles at me and makes me feel self-concious...but I like having a song in my heart!
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5 posted 11-01-1999 04:24 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Suthern: So sad but wonderfully done my friend...

Big HUSG

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6 posted 11-01-1999 05:30 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

( "Mr. Sandman" continues.......)

Hey, there, Suthern,
You're such a mess
You're overloaded
With nerves and with stress
You bet your savings
on that foolish slow nag
Thinking to win with that
Nogoodnik Toerag!

Hey, there, Suthern
Don't waste your time
Find other poets
That don't fracture rhyme

And move right up to quality
Hey there, Suthern, dump Toe. Pick me!



Andrew Scott
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7 posted 11-01-1999 05:40 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Well done Suthern. I too find the shower is a place where poetic ideas come about. Something to do with water and the flow of ideas? Hmmmm.... Oh well, again, thanks for the read.
Iloveit
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8 posted 11-01-1999 05:43 PM       View Profile for Iloveit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Iloveit

well after all day, I finally made it ...whew...great job, just loved the imaging, and hey if you get your wish, share ok?
hugs
WhtDove
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9 posted 11-01-1999 05:55 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Great one, imaginative you are!
Watcher666
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10 posted 11-01-1999 06:01 PM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Liked this much.Well done.

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11 posted 11-01-1999 06:48 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Rainbow, Andrew, Lovey, WhtDove and Watcher... thank you all very much for your kind words... I appreciate them greatly! *S*

And Balladeer... ROFLMAO... You are SO brave when you know darn well you are SO safe! LOL. But thanks for the grins!
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12 posted 11-01-1999 11:58 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very well done, Suthern! I enjoyed this!

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Denise

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13 posted 11-02-1999 04:22 AM       View Profile for JTF   Email JTF   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for JTF

Auntie, we had been expecting a poem from you for a while ... but it was worth it ... superb ...

and I add a SMOOCH to RG's hugs !

[This message has been edited by JTF (edited 11-02-1999).]
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14 posted 11-02-1999 07:22 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

dsnyder & JTF: Thank you! And Froggie... smooches are always welcomed! *G*
Seymour Tabin
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15 posted 11-02-1999 09:24 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Suthern,
What the hell you don't need a shell
Shells are for snails you need a sail.
Sails are for ships that sail the sea.
And the water is fine just sail with me.
Just write yourself a queen in a dream.
Make it a good one if you know what I mean.
A dream will not keep you overlong, but
Warm, until mister right comes along. *L*
Pepper
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Very creative suthern.....
Sad and so well written!

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suthern
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17 posted 11-02-1999 09:44 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Thank you, Pepper... Lor assures me creative is good, so I'm beaming with the responses! *G*

And Seymour... you dear!!! Thank you!
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18 posted 11-02-1999 10:33 AM       View Profile for Blackdrake   Email Blackdrake   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Blackdrake

It is a sad tale. But well written.

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Thy own Darkness shall conquer the Light
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19 posted 11-02-1999 11:19 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Very well done gal....and such nice replies from the others as well...(except for that mean damn bug man...and I've been so kind to him lately...turnin' the other cheek and all that other crap).....LOL
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20 posted 11-02-1999 11:32 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Thank you, Blackdrake and Toe... and Toe, I'd noticed that, too... That bug man never misses an opportunity to be mean to you... and you're so kind to him... I simply don't understand it! LOL
 
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