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Shooting Star

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Thunder Moomba
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since 10-30-1999
Posts 21
Baldwin Park, CA, USA


0 posted 11-01-1999 12:17 AM       View Profile for Thunder Moomba   Email Thunder Moomba   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Thunder Moomba

You were always there when I needed you,
You never left my side.

Always there to lean on,
And dry the tears I cried.

I could always talk to you,
And you never seemed to mind.

Your voice so honest and gentle,
Your words so honest and kind.

I thought I'd never meet someone
as special as you are.

You are my best friend in the whole world,
And thats why You are my shooting star.


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I don't think this poem went well. Can you E-Mail or respond and tell me what u think of it? Thank You


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Jr. Rodrigo M. Daz_
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Isis
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since 09-06-99
Posts 6390
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1 posted 11-01-1999 12:32 AM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

TM it's fine!! Better descriptions and imagery will come to you with time and practise. But this is great!! Don't be so quick to condemn yourself ok?

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Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Every man goes down to his death bearing in his hands only that which he has given away...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


Watcher666
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2 posted 11-02-1999 06:02 AM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Well done!!!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
Dark Angel
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3 posted 11-02-1999 06:15 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Loved it !!

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Thunder Moomba
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4 posted 11-02-1999 11:32 AM       View Profile for Thunder Moomba   Email Thunder Moomba   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Thunder Moomba

Thank You Isis, Thank You Watcher, Thank ya Dark

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