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The Night I Met You (A challange from Whtdove)

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hoot_owl_rn
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0 posted 10-31-1999 09:35 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

The Night I Met You

The south wind blew mellow
Grass was covered in dew
The pale moon shone brightly
On the night I met you

The mist on the ocean
Was just starting to rise
Breath caught for a moment
When I looked in your eyes

The depths of my own soul
It reflected was there
And just for a moment
Became too much to bear

You mirrored all my fears
All my hurt and my pain
You pulled me in gently
As it started to rain

The downpour refreshing
We could not feel itís chill
It ended abruptly
And the night became still

I heard your heart beating
It was so near to mine
Two hearts became one heart
Beating rhythms in time

We walked by the ocean
Saw the lights from the ships
You pulled me in closer
As you first kissed my lips

Were the stars that I glimpsed
In the skies or my mind?
Were the feelings I felt
Dreams that Iíd hoped to find?

Was it cool when we met
That night in November?
I was lost in your eyes
And I canít remember



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This is courage...to bear unflinchingly what heaven sends. ~Eurpides
© Copyright 1999 Ruth Kephart - All Rights Reserved
Systematic Decay
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1 posted 10-31-1999 09:39 AM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Systematic Decay

How beautiful, hoot. I really love this one.

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-
WhtDove
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2 posted 10-31-1999 10:24 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Well my dear friend! You certainly rose to the occasion! sigh...beautiful work but I knew it would be. Love it!!!
Ohme
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3 posted 10-31-1999 11:16 AM       View Profile for Ohme   Email Ohme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ohme

Hoot, this is lovely.
Corinne
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4 posted 10-31-1999 12:31 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Hoot! I love this! I grew up at the ocean, met my first love there, and I can see myself in this poem. I can also envision you and your love as well.

The imagery is perfect.

Corinne
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5 posted 10-31-1999 12:43 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Beautiful poem, Hoot...and the meter is wonderful.
Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 10-31-1999 12:57 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Hoot,
I can only emulate Balladeer, beautiful poem
wonderful meter.
Denise
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7 posted 10-31-1999 12:58 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is very beautiful, Hoot! So dreamy!

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Denise

Verma
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8 posted 10-31-1999 01:58 PM       View Profile for Verma   Email Verma   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Verma

what more can i say other than beautiful...
hoot_owl_rn
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9 posted 10-31-1999 05:39 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Thanks everyone for your kind comments

Balladeer, thanks for pointing out the fact the meter didn't quite catch it on the first version...and thanks for your comment about it here
Munda
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10 posted 10-31-1999 05:41 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

*Sigh*....beautiful Hoot. : )
Isis
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11 posted 10-31-1999 05:46 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

So beautiful Hoot, another big (sigh)

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Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Every man goes down to his death bearing in his hands only that which he has given away...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


Skyfyre
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12 posted 10-31-1999 05:52 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Absolutely spellbinding!

--Kess

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You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.

hoot_owl_rn
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14 posted 10-31-1999 08:14 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Munda, Isis and Skyfire...thank you for your comments

marzar...what a wonderful comment, I'm not sure I am deserving of it, but thank you none the less
Severn
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15 posted 11-01-1999 08:01 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Lovely...but that's not a surprise!
Watcher666
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16 posted 11-02-1999 03:29 AM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Loved this....so beautiful!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
Dark Angel
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17 posted 11-02-1999 06:41 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Hoot, this is truly beautiful, loved it

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


handbagsatfiftypaces
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18 posted 11-02-1999 07:26 AM       View Profile for handbagsatfiftypaces   Email handbagsatfiftypaces   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for handbagsatfiftypaces

yes it's good hoot, it has almost perfect rhyme and meter and all that. it makes me sad
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