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The Rose (Per the request of WhtDove)
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The Rose (Per the request of WhtDove) |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA 
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I am a rock and you are a rose I lay at your feet so close to your toes. You're face is so lovely, looks soft to the touch mines like the moon and not touched very much. Your stem is just perfect, so trim and so lean I'm neither pebble nor boulder but somewhere between. A rose is admired by most everyone A rock just gets stepped on or thrown just for fun. Like dew off your petals or rain from the sky Just lean on my shoulder if you need to cry. A rose is so fragile a rock has much strength Should you lean on me now, I will hold you at length. A rose is to romance as beauty to love I'm a rock in your garden can you see me from above? ------------------ ~*~ Time erases and rewrites all the lines. What remains is the poetry! ~*~ |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
I thought this one is really, really, beautiful ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very lovely sentiments, Echo. Thanks for reposting this!  ------------------ Denise |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Absolutely beautiful Echo! Thanks for reposting it! ------------------ Cast your eyes on the ocean, Every man goes down to his death bearing in his hands only that which he has given away... ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I've liked this from the first time I saw it posted |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I loved this unlikely pair and the poem. I didn't see it the first time so thanks for reposting it. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Ha ! I just read this in open#2 and loved it ! How wonderful to find it here, so others will enjoy it too. : ) |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Thanks you sweetie! The imaging is fantastic. I really love this, and I'm glad you reposted it to share with the others. |
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Verma Member
since 1999-10-25
Posts 80Midlands, England |
"A rock just gets stepped on, or thrown just for fun.." Just about says it all. |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Amy...Thank you Denise...Thank you No prob!Isis...Thank you No prob!Ruth...Thanks for reading again Martie...Glad you liked it, thank you Munda...Thank you Rebecca...Twas your request it be reposted. Glad you liked it! Verma...Yes, I guess it does quite say a lot. Thanks for reading! ------------------ ~*~ Time erases and rewrites all the lines. What remains is the poetry! ~*~ |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
this was my reply from open #2. There were not many and I was very surprised by this. This is a touching, beautifully written work of art. I asked her that she repost this for everyone else to see. Thank you melanie! Melanie thank you for sending this to me, no I didn't read it. I am VERY surprised that this don't have more than one comment on here. This was absolutely beautiful! So much meaning my dear. I love how you used the symbolism here. Very, very well written. You should be so proud of yourself, you talent amazes me at how you can put things into words. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Echo, I'm sorry but I had not seen this before. It is excellent. Wonderful metaphors used in the rose and the rock and the way you tie them together. A very worthy poem indeed. |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Rebecca...Proud of myself? No, cant say that I am. As for it only getting on reply in O.P#2 all I can say it is is beter than none and I was expecting none. Balladeer...Thank you ------------------ ~*~ Time erases and rewrites all the lines. What remains is the poetry! ~*~ |
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