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devina
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since 1999-10-28
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Cali

0 posted 1999-10-30 02:46 AM


She may only be five,
but she damn well understands-
Why daddy doesn't have the time,
he has another family to attend.

It's her birthday today-
she pretends you'll be here this time,
But daddy isn't here to light the candles on her cake.
And once again I cover for you, "daddy's always working late."

She blames herself for your misuse of love and parenthood.
You could call or write,
do something that you should.

If you watched our little girl-
with her tear stained face and night shirt,
If you had to answer her pitiful questions-
"why doesn't daddy love me anymore?"

"Have i been so bad mama?-
so bad that daddy went away?"
"If i promise to be good mama,
will that make daddy stay?"

I love our daughter dearly-
I almost loved you as much,
But as I watch her cry herself to sleep,
I know that forever will be just the two of us.

© Copyright 1999 Tanya Nicole Bustamante - All Rights Reserved
desperado
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since 1999-05-24
Posts 312
FT Hood,Tx
1 posted 1999-11-08 03:49 PM


this is sad. It's a matter of maturity that makes us who we are. and sometimes people never realize the things we do to others. I thought this was a nice piece here, though it seems like you are torn between rhyming and not rhyming. it's a minor matter though, and doesn't really detract from this piece.
passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
2 posted 2004-04-18 03:15 PM


heart wrenching
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