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Martie
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0 posted 1999-10-29 11:21 PM



Smile
my daughter my child of thirty three
my girl of dirty words
and runny nose
my girl of tempers and kisses.

What if you died,
your breath a sour ball,
your gross heavy chest
taking its final sigh
and made me free.

A weed grows
pluck it out
who would be the
mother of a monster

but,

there are times of
splashing bubbles
TV and popcorn
holding hands
a catching in the throat.
Or
what if I turned cold
one morning
and did not wake
to your head pounding
on the mattress beside me
you screaming again and again
MOTHER! (I am your clock
your legs
your conscience)

Smile
my daughter
my child of thirty three
my girl of dirty words
and runny nose
my girl of tempers and kisses

I was empty ‘til you filled me.

© Copyright 1999 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Balladeer
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1 posted 1999-10-29 11:27 PM


Wow! There is so much to digest in this piece. I'm gonna read it a few more times. Excellent writing.
Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 1999-10-29 11:40 PM


Martie,
You captured an ellusive essence about the love of a child that is almost impossible in words. Excellent.

hoot_owl_rn
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3 posted 1999-10-30 11:09 AM


Martie....this is absolutely wonderful
tori
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4 posted 1999-10-30 11:26 AM


Martie you grace unconditional....
Pepper
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5 posted 1999-10-30 11:33 AM


Excellent Martie!!.....one for my files....A very impressive work....

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A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extrordinaire!

Martie
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6 posted 1999-10-30 12:42 PM


Thankyou all for these words about my words.
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