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Our fates were tangled...

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Master
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0 posted 10-29-1999 10:40 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Our fates were tangled, we were blessed
But soon our time expires
‘Till then don’t cry, nor fake your jest
Let life stay as it is
Don’t put your palm upon my chest
We’re like electric wires
Don’t close your eyes and do not rest
Or else we’ll meet in bliss

A single touch and flames will rise
We’ll start eternal fires
A single gaze and in your eyes
My hopeless stare may freeze
And love may come in a disguise
Into immortal lyres
My soul will pour out only lies
And endless love may cease


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I fell in love and kept on falling
© Copyright 1999 Andrey Kneller - All Rights Reserved
Rico
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1 posted 10-29-1999 10:50 PM       View Profile for Rico   Email Rico   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rico

Beautiful! loved the word choice
Master
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2 posted 10-29-1999 11:09 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Thanks Rico!
Master
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3 posted 10-29-1999 11:58 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Any suggestions on how to make this better?
Isis
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4 posted 10-30-1999 01:51 AM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

I love it just the way it is SO, I'm no help

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Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Every man goes down to his death bearing in his hands only that which he has given away...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


Master
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5 posted 10-30-1999 08:32 AM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Thanks anyway!
Watcher666
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6 posted 11-02-1999 06:21 PM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Wouldn't change a word.Awesome!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
Pepper
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7 posted 11-02-1999 07:35 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Beautiful just the way it is......

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A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extrordinaire!
Master
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8 posted 11-02-1999 09:47 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Thank you!
Corinne
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9 posted 11-02-1999 10:29 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

I love the last line epecially, Master

I've read a couple other of your poems, you write love very well...One would hazard a guess that this is from experience. If so, thanks for letting us in ever so briefly.


Corinne
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10 posted 04-25-2004 09:55 PM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

awesome!
 
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