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A walk in the sun

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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 10-29-1999 09:03 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Seymour Tabin

A Walk in The Sun

Shallowing in a tropic sea
Gathering antiquity's birth
I dawdle in serenity.

The body warms in sundry rays
From whimsy's sip of mental mirth
A tea baptismal in the waves.

Absorbed in my temerity
Left high and dry from neap's full worth
I steep in rare exotic tea.

Sacrosanct and minuscule.
With inquiries of a fool.

© Copyright 1999 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 10-29-1999 09:08 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

This is great! You made me run to the dictionary to expand my vocabulary! Good one, Sy!
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Ditto! It takes balls to use words like that. I mean, people that don't understand it have to TRY and do so. You're a great poet/writer, and you should definitely post some more because I am now greatly interested in your work.

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RSEvans
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Ditto ditto. I'm sometimes afraid to use larger words for I fear I don't know the meaning of near enough. How embarassing to use one for rhyme that means something other than what was intended.

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Seymour Tabin
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Sunshine,
Thank you for the high praise.
And I remain,
Sacrosanct and minuscule
With inquiries of a fool. *L*
Brandon,
I usually don't use words like sacrosanct and minuscule but you see what temerity will do. Thanks for the read and comment.
hoot_owl_rn
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Seymore, interesting format, it works well. Nice use of vocabulary
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You need to know, I had to look up "neap"! The other words, I knew them...LOL! Now, if everyone here knew what it meant, I'll really look foolish. Oh well, how other than to spend a Friday?
Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 10-29-1999 05:18 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

RSEvans,
I usually don't like large words but in this case it seemed to fit, thanks for the read.
Hoot,
I'm glad you liked the poem I feel it's a good one.
Sunshine,
A nice way to spend a friday and thank you for the read.
Pepper
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I like the rhythm of this Sy, and like the rest, I used the dictionary too.
A very good read!

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Martie
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I really liked this Seymour. For some reason I thought of TS Elliot's, "Love song..." Now I have a new word, neap, so thankyou. To "dawdle in serenity", wonderful!
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10 posted 10-29-1999 09:19 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

A lovely walk, indeed! Great one Seymour! (sorry for being so repetitious!)

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Seymour Tabin
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11 posted 10-29-1999 11:33 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Pepper,
If you liked it I am happy it doesn't take much, just a comment. Thank you.
Martie,
So glad you enjoyed the read. Most water people are familar with the words neap tide.
Denise,
Hey, great is ok with me and especially from you.
 
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