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tori
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since 1999-06-18
Posts 520
Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA

0 posted 1999-10-28 02:29 AM


Just a house wife with time to kill
Lets have fun and find a thrill
Try this chat room out for fun
Tell them this and that and run
Some were truths some were lies
Some were smart but not so wise

Danced around the clock for day's
Hold on sweetie got a job that pays
Have to work for the nice old Judge
To put my only son through school
His father died, now that was cruel..
We grew up together ya see
My son almost looks as old as me
I'm so strong I'm so free..

Day's flew by weeks and months
All awhile the lies kept on
Never stooped to question why
But I had feelings for this guy
Before I knew it we were hooked
Then I knew my goose was cooked

Coming to see me what~ when~ where?
I've got to end this love affair
I can't do it I'm not that strong
How can I go on doing wrong
I'm so full of it you see
but telling lies was killing me

The time it came to face the news
I knew from the start that I would loose
I love you miss you, can't take no more
I was ready to run right out my door

I stopped and asked my self just why?
I had to stop telling all these lies
Because inside I loved him true
In love with a lie,
And that just wont do
He accepted oh to well
I had expected to be told go to hell

I would have run right there and then
Out my door never looking back again
But way back somewhere inside me
The truth unlocked let me see
The image was the thing he loved
though his words told me no
I knew it true and had to go

I had to put my life in check
So I said good bye, I was a wreck
Months have past since I've seen this man
Almost a year that the affair began
So take it from me, who lost her heart
Finish what you didn't mean to start

Tori 1999

© Copyright 1999 Victoria Hosier/tori - All Rights Reserved
Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
1 posted 1999-10-28 02:44 AM


A hard time to endure Tori, but you wrote it so well.

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How long after you are gone will ripples remain as evidence that you were cast into the pool?
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)



Watcher666
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since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606

2 posted 1999-10-28 02:52 AM


Well done!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
3 posted 1999-10-28 06:30 AM


Arghh, this is just wrong. Sad, indeed.

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Michael Anderson

Is all that we see or seem
but a dream within a dream?



tori
Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520
Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA
4 posted 1999-10-28 03:21 PM


Thanks Isis, I think it would be makes you wonder how people get caught up in it..but they do everyday..

Thanks Watcher..:-)


I agree with you Michael, people playing with emotions this is wrong....

poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646
Arkansas
5 posted 1999-10-28 03:41 PM


Well, on a more positive note Tori...I really liked the last line! It spoke volumes to me! I have been so skeptical at times....I met Michael online...it was instant attraction through our poetry...his soul spoke to mine...spiritually, not just physically. Wow, was I not expecting anything like that to happen! When I read this poem....and the last line - "finish what you didn't mean to start..." to me that means alot in his and my case. I didn't mean to start anything here....but because of what I feel for him, I must finish it, and will. We are planning to meet in December...so there are some happy endings....just wish us luck, ok? I sure wish yours could have been a bit happier. Don't give up - -

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~~ Lift your head high - spread your "words" and fly - - poetFemmeFatale


tori
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since 1999-06-18
Posts 520
Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA
6 posted 1999-10-28 06:03 PM


Thanks for you comments Fatale, this is not a me situation here tho I know of some who have had this happen to them.. I've also had friends meet and get hooked up on the net, I think its great!! Congrats on yours.. where the poem is different then your situation is she has lied.. she has created a false identy that some one fell in love with, then her feelings became more then what they should have.. the point here is to be honest first. being miss lead is so very easy on the computer, and love is as real here as anywhere peoples emotions get smashed... because it can happen, right out the blue
I wish you well... :-)

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
7 posted 1999-10-28 10:57 PM


SOme people don't realize there is a person behind the screen. Playing games with a persons emotions is never a good thing.
Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

8 posted 1999-10-28 11:04 PM


This is excellent, tori, I enjoyed this!

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Denise


WhtDove
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
9 posted 1999-10-28 11:54 PM


Oh Tori, I guess I'm in the mood for crying tonight. Cause I want to cry! I can relate to this. NO, I am not doing the same thing. Just the emotions that you describe here, the confusion and all. It touched me friend!
Michael
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since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
10 posted 1999-10-29 02:26 AM


Thank you Femme for putting into words so eloquently what I could not last night. To take this poem and reflect on "Femme and Michael" left me next to speechless....with an overwhelming sense of despair. All I caopuld say was "Wrong". This was a soulwrencher, tori.

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Michael Anderson

Is all that we see or seem
but a dream within a dream?



tori
Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520
Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA
11 posted 1999-10-29 06:44 PM


Your right Ruth.. never good not if your playing !!

Thanks Denise

WhtDove one thing this pome does not convey is that you can change your identy with pitures and what you do, things you like but in the all of it I don't think anyone can change, or hide their personality.. so I guess honesty lies in emotions? I've had to take a second look at it myself.. lol

Michael thanks for the second reply ...

WhtDove
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
12 posted 1999-10-29 08:16 PM


Tori your right. It is easy to tell someone your something your not. Especially when they don't know you. I for one am not that way. That is a tough situation! Thanks Tori!
RobertB
Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104
Champaign, IL
13 posted 1999-10-29 08:19 PM


I can't read that Tori...

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if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming.

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