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candace
Junior Member
since 1999-09-05
Posts 14
los angeles, california

0 posted 1999-10-27 11:11 PM




glistening water drops,
drizzle deep beneath my soul

mystical memoirs of colors,
shattering the dark light

vividly speaking,
he walks closer to me

glancing in my direction,
causing a motion of satisfaction

softness of his kiss,
wetness of his embrace

quivering insanity,
echoing,defiantly within

touch of his hand,
slowly shadowing my face

the longest touch,
the sweetest embrace

© Copyright 1999 candace - All Rights Reserved
Sally S.
Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847
Ohio
1 posted 1999-10-27 11:40 PM


To me, I see two lovers..embracing amidst the darkness of night during a summer storm. Is that correct? I like the imagery.
Watcher666
Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606

2 posted 1999-10-28 01:18 AM


Nicely done

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

Julie
Senior Member
since 1999-08-20
Posts 739
Houston, TX
3 posted 1999-10-29 08:47 PM


This one deserves another go around...nice imagery, good feeling.
Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

4 posted 1999-10-29 08:52 PM


I agree with Sally, Watcher and Julie, very lovely!

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Denise


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