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The dross of Pathos
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The dross of Pathos |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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The Dross of Pathos The grate of pathos makes for dross. The shed of dross, to beds of moss. And fertile moss sweetens the man. Only time, can finish the plan. Spring has gone and Decembers cold. The fires old and does not hold. Its embers stir. They sigh for care. While slurs of ashes die of wear. Life still searches in hope and cling, Of textured winds, another spring. To sense with fevered hand, no glove, The presence of, new buds of love. It asks no bliss nor homage lift, No dying kiss set it adrift. It would a final gusty cry, Cry aye, to one more lusty try. Although our body dies of wear, Our mind will always hope and dare. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
That's for sure! EXCELLENT! Loved it!  ------------------ Denise |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
This was well-written on many levels, but I must say my favorite line was: "Its embers stir. They sigh for care." A most effective use of personification, sir -- rarely have I seen it so cleverly done. --Kess ------------------ You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end. |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
This was great Sey... I enjoyed ... |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Liked this very much! Excellent! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
I'm sorry Sy - but I'nm shaking my head at how you can ever think your poetry is simplistic? This is rich and beautiful! Tch tch - simple... |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Your song shines brightly this night, Sy. Such sweet verse always makes me smile. ------------------ Michael Anderson Is all that we see or seem but a dream within a dream? |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Denise, You are a love and I thank you for the praise. Skyfyre, Many levels and personification is high praise I thank you much. Tori, Great sounds pretty good to me. Severn. Sometimes I go a touch beyond simple, enjoyed your comment. *L* Michael, There are still a few bright embers left to bright some small of the night. Thank you Michael. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Seymore....this poem displays your fine talents well. Nicely written |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Hoot, Thank you very much for the read and comment. |
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