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My contribution to the acrostic-sestina challenge

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Skyfyre
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0 posted 10-27-1999 10:39 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Skyfyre

Deepening shadows chase the fleeing light,
Empowered by the promise of the night --
A willing lover offers dark embrace
To those who dare to look upon his face --
His visage cold, his eyes of onyx made;
Impartial, Death performs his solemn trade.

Silent, he waits: the hallmark of his trade
Never to rush; outwait the failing light.
Obsidian his gaze -- their blackness made
To hold the ebon void of endless night.
Abysmal depth in unrevealing face,
No soul escapes his perilous embrace.

Ensnared in this internecine embrace,
No sooner caught but any man would trade
Dearest of dreams to see his lover's face
But one last time -- to stand in dawn's first light
Unworried for the coming of the night --
Too late, these dreams; and thus are nightmares made.

The kings and slaves by him are equals made:
Herein, they all are one, and all embrace
Effusively the solace of the night.
Still, e'en adoring darkness, they will trade
This lasting peace for one caress of light --
And then, unrest in ceaseless midnight face.

Reward eternal, now, the slain must face --
Their pact with shadow, sealed in silence, made:
Outcast forever from the realm of light,
Forced exile seems a welcoming embrace.
A quest for peace, with souls bestowed in trade,
Now those who loved the sun revere the night.

Enduring and secure -- beloved night
Wild beauty in his all-concealing face;
Jeweled monarch, chthonian, and Death his trade --
Of souls and shadow are his vestments made.
Unchanging and relentless his embrace,
Reclaiming wearied souls from brutal light.

Nocturnal liege, no light shall mar your face --
Eternal night, your kingdom we have made;
Yon dark embrace the mercy of your trade.


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You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.

© Copyright 1999 Linda Anderson - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 10-27-1999 10:47 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Yep, consider me impressed! This is wonderful! Another acrostic sestina that rhymes. Amazing!

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Denise
Skyfyre
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2 posted 10-27-1999 11:41 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Thank you, Denise, for your words of praise. This piece was a welcome challenge, though I'll admit at points it is a bit tedious to read -- some of the meter had to be sacrificed to maintain form and rhyme (though I believe the pentameter is indeed intact, I was unable to make it iambic throughout).

Such is life. I enjoyed writing it, and that is reward in itself.

Again, thank you for the reply.

--Kesslynne
Sally S.
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3 posted 10-27-1999 11:47 PM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

Woah....a dark piece for sure..perfect for this time of year I'd say. Great job. I know how much of a task this was.
Watcher666
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4 posted 10-28-1999 01:19 AM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Impressive! Well done!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
For_Never
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5 posted 10-28-1999 01:50 AM       View Profile for For_Never   Email For_Never   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for For_Never

Very well done, at once I feel as the Hunter, alive, encroached, passionate in my disires, and also the prey, mundane, vital, alive. But not only that, I can also so as a third party, enraptured by beauty and horror...most of all, envy..

Great...very good..
Michael
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6 posted 10-28-1999 07:02 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Skyfire, this is truly a delight to read,
and a much appreciated point of view on Death. Thank you for the effort that went into this. A wonderful job.


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Michael Anderson

Is all that we see or seem
but a dream within a dream?


Skyfyre
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7 posted 10-28-1999 10:21 AM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Sally: I read and appreciated both your acrostic sestinas, and it was your impressive work that convinced me this could be done -- thank you for the inspiration and the comment.

Watcher: I seek only to entertain, not to impress -- but thank you for taking the time to reply!

For_Never: It is always wonderful to receive a reply that tells me what the reader's perception of my work was -- thank you for describing the journey that my writing took you on.

Michael: I bask in your praise, as it has been my pleasure to read many of your finely-crafted works -- both the more recent ones, which celebrate your love for poetFemmeFatale, and the ones in archive that reveal the dark side of your nature -- and I have yet to read one I did not enjoy immensely. Thank you again for taking the time to give me your thoughts.

--Kess
Skyfyre
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8 posted 10-28-1999 06:12 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

It seems as though everyone is writing these things ... guess I'll have to jump on the old bandwagon myself here, or else be left behind ...

This was intense and captivating ... and the way you pulled off both the acrostic and the sestina is a testament to yor skill. BTW: I didn't think the changes in meter stumbled at all; they made the poem more interesting in my opinion. Well done!

Nocht

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"Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus"
(Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.")

Starith
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9 posted 10-28-1999 08:11 PM       View Profile for Starith   Email Starith   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Starith

Interesting piece. I enjoyed the read. My hat is off to you, I don't think I could have done such a piece as this. Good job.



Star

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We are only truly apperciated after we are no more!


hoot_owl_rn
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10 posted 10-28-1999 10:46 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Okay, I'm impressed and feeling a little out of my league on this one. Fine job
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