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Acrostic Sestina 2 (Challenge from Christopher)

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Sally S.
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0 posted 10-27-1999 12:07 PM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Sally S.

This is my second, more serious attempt....with added bonus!!! RHYME!!!

Two Formed as One



I know my love for you, at last
Within my heart forever true.
In dreams you’ve always come to me,
Like calming winds of mem’ries past.
Love softly finds it’s way to you
To capture what is meant to be.

Remain in truth of what will be,
Embrace this strength and make it last.
As life engulfs its time with you,
Surrender to this love so true.
Unspoken passion from the past,
Reveal your feelings now of me.

Evoke these dreams you’ve brought to me.
Yesterday simply can not be!
Over throw those thoughts of the past,
Undying love is ours at last!
For hearts tell tales of wishes true,
Oh love, my soul belongs with you.

Reach for those stars I’d give to you,
Ask naught of what you give to me.
Loosened heartstrings, oh yes, it’s true.
Look to the future, what will be.
Envisage time, for it will last,
Tormented lovers now in past.

Erelong, there will not be this past.
Regard now what I say to you...
Negate false thoughts that this won’t last.
Intrigue the night, come follow me
To a place where we’ll finally be
Yielding never more, my love true.

Melodic forces forming true,
You cast aside fears of the past,
Of silent question, “What will be?”
Now strong, I stand here right with you,
Enraptured by your stance with me.
Love formed two souls as one at last.

Ordained it’s true, both me and you…
Victors of our past. Now with me,
Each day will be, one more to last.


© Copyright 1999 Sally - All Rights Reserved
Toerag
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Ala bam a


1 posted 10-27-1999 12:16 PM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

OH! It's a poem type?....I thought maybe an Acrostic Sestina was some kinda medical condition? Yanno, I just now completed "Mary Had A Little Lamb" 101 and have so much to learn, (obviously)....this was great Sal...takes alot of thought and ability!
Balladeer
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2 posted 10-27-1999 12:51 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

ABsolutely incredible, Sally. A beautiful piece of work....and to create such a long acrostic....wow!
Watcher666
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3 posted 10-27-1999 01:56 PM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

WOW! Beautifully done! Liked this much.

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
Denise
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4 posted 10-27-1999 05:46 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

An acrostic sestina that rhymes! VERY EXCELLENT!

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Denise
Dr.Moose1
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5 posted 10-27-1999 08:28 PM       View Profile for Dr.Moose1   Email Dr.Moose1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dr.Moose1

Deep in the forest where there are many things un-spoken there is a word for poems such as this .... WOW!
Systematic Decay
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6 posted 10-27-1999 08:35 PM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Systematic Decay

Ok.....this is just too much....Chris outdid himself with the acrostic sestina....and you even exceeded that with the addition of rhyme....congratulations-this is quite impressive indeed!

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-
Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration


7 posted 10-27-1999 08:42 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

(grumbling...)
You weren't supposed to outdo me!!!
But you did, a magnificent job and a challenge well met!
I honestly didn't expect you to do it, much less so quickly, and much much less, to make it rhyme!!!
(going back to drawing board...)
Sally S.
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8 posted 10-27-1999 11:10 PM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

My dear Toe,
I'm sure you could teach me a few things....LOL Thank you.

Mike,
To get an incredible and a wow from you at the same time must mean I've finally done something right! Thank you, darlin'.

Watcher, Denise, Dr. Moose and Sys. Decay...
Thank you all from the bottom of my heart. Your encouraging words mean a great deal...more than you could know.

Christopher,
I was not setting out on this journey with thoughts of "out-doing" you or any of the other fine poets in our poetry home. I truly appreciate the compliments...Thank you, kind sir. Oh..and one more thing....DON'T CHALLENGE ME AGAIN! LOL (j/k) What a task! WHEW!
Michael
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9 posted 10-28-1999 08:10 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Hey Chris, you get more competition evry dat, don't you. Fabulous work, Sally. this was exceptional.

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Michael Anderson

Is all that we see or seem
but a dream within a dream?


suthern
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10 posted 10-28-1999 09:06 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Enjoyed very much, Sally... well done!
hoot_owl_rn
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11 posted 10-28-1999 08:12 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Sally, As I said in CA, my hat's off to you!
 
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