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John Yaws
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since 1999-10-09
Posts 860
Texas

0 posted 1999-10-27 11:30 AM


I stared into the haunted eyes-
Of an inmate yesterday.....
“I was once as you are now”.
Is what they seemed to say.

The things I saw within his gaze-
Made me want to flee-
“Beware, unless you would become
Just such a one as me.”

Lines of dissipation
Scored his facial planes-
Where once was youth and happiness
Stark tragedy remains.

Twixt guys like him, and guys like me
There stands a solid line-
Yet one so easy to be crossed-
For it is very fine.

I see the “ghost of Christmas past”
In his defeated face-
The things that are, the things that were
The tragedy ...disgrace.

Than fall into this sordid trap-
I think I’d rather die-
And yet the snare has taken more
And better men than I.


© Copyright 1999 John R. Yaws - All Rights Reserved
Marilyn
Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
1 posted 1999-10-27 11:41 AM


Wow...solid message here! I believe the difference between us and them is hope. Every life experiences tragedy, how we deal with it is the key. There is always hope but we must search for it. Thaks for the read.
Watcher666
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since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606

2 posted 1999-10-27 01:51 PM


Exvellent! Enjoyed the read.Sums up life's choice and were we choose to be.

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

3 posted 1999-10-27 06:36 PM


This is wonderful. I enjoyed this very much!

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Denise

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
4 posted 1999-10-27 06:42 PM


A very fine message with this one, nicely done
Verma
Member
since 1999-10-25
Posts 80
Midlands, England
5 posted 1999-10-27 06:48 PM


Gunslinger - I understand the topic quite well, and believe that you have put together a very strong piece... Well Done!
Andrew Scott
Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA
6 posted 1999-10-27 08:15 PM


GS: Another one for the Kudos factory. I got to say I like your style. I bow to you and yours.
Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
7 posted 1999-10-27 08:55 PM


A great message, well done, and welcome to Passions

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How long after you are gone will ripples remain as evidence that you were cast into the pool?
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)



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