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DreamEvil
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0 posted 10-27-1999 05:39 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

In my heart I felt the last of love die.
My own pain has dwelt too long in the dark.
Stark raving madness made my life a lie.
My own sadness has doused passion's spark.

Pray for dying love as pain serves you well.
Tell to God above your venomous hate.
State that love's deceit paves the road to hell.
Sell your soul for sin not holy dictate.

Truth always condemns what lies will redeem.
Scream putrid love stems from cancerous souls.
Goals die without form though we always dream.
Scheme not to conform but to breakdown roles.

Evil does contrast the souls who do good.
Understood at last evil will remain.
Slain by holy deeds your fame is obscure.
Endure loving deeds to take on more pain.


©1999 DreamEvil


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Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©

© Copyright 1999 DreamEvil - All Rights Reserved
Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration


1 posted 10-27-1999 05:43 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

This is an AWESOME poem...structure, style, message...perfect in every part...
One of the best ones yet brother!
Watcher666
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2 posted 10-27-1999 06:04 AM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Excellent! In awe of your ability to produce such wonders brother of my heart.

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
RSEvans
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3 posted 10-27-1999 06:20 AM       View Profile for RSEvans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RSEvans

and yet within the good lies the evil and within the evil, good...an excellent piece.

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No matter where you go, somebody's probably already been there and gotten the parking space...
JennyLee
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4 posted 10-27-1999 06:23 AM       View Profile for JennyLee   Email JennyLee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JennyLee

Truth always condemns what lies will redeem.
Exquiste!!

Jenny
Ohme
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5 posted 10-27-1999 07:00 AM       View Profile for Ohme   Email Ohme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ohme

Very nice!
I like the phrase

Truth always condemns what lies will redeem
DreamEvil
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6 posted 10-27-1999 09:14 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Thank you much as I put a bit of effort into the internal and end rhyme scheme. Turned out well I thought.

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Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
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Skyfyre
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Sitting in Michael's Lap


7 posted 10-27-1999 09:20 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

'Twas a difficult task you took on here -- and made it look effortless. Very well done.

--Kess

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You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.

Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 10-27-1999 09:31 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

DreamEvil,
This is a keeper, well done.
Serain
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9 posted 10-27-1999 09:35 PM       View Profile for Serain   Email Serain   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for Serain

very good
very dark
hence dark passions
DreamEvil
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10 posted 10-27-1999 09:43 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Much thanks for the response to this piece, though 'tis not truly of the Light, still do I find it uplifting.

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Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©

Michael
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11 posted 10-30-1999 02:50 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Wow, Dream,
I must apologize for missing this the first time through. Ditto Chris, and I can see the effort that went into this one...I love the use of internal rhyme you know. Awesome, indeed.

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Michael Anderson

And after-drunkeness of soul
Succeeds the glory of the bowl -
An idle longing night and day
To dream my very life away


EAP

wayoutwalt
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TEXAS (it's all big)


12 posted 10-30-1999 02:54 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

thankyou dream for the thought provoking verse well done
Systematic Decay
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13 posted 10-30-1999 03:54 PM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Systematic Decay

Very good piece my frined- I too loved the line:

Truth always condemns what lies will redeem

Great job

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-
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