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Panning for gold

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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 10-26-1999 01:48 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Panning for gold

A man paints his face with sorrow,
From a kit of borrow.
A tear, a frown, a sad embrace,
Macabre he paints his face.

He molds it, but his eyes twinkle,
Like a Rip Van Winkle.
Draws the lines in black of borrow,
The face, wretched sorrow.

The mirrors image sets the mood.
A sad and somber brood.
He nods consent of glooms display
And stores the kit away.

He hides behind a closed curtain,.
Fearful and uncertain.
Stumbles forward in raucous view,
His awkward fall a rue.

The audience roars in laughter.
Howls fly to the rafters.
His eyes rain out sympathy clouds,
For mercy from the crowd.

Then antics follow in pursuit,
He honks and blows his snoot.
And then to every ones surprise
Squirts water out his eyes.

He turns away his gloomy head,
Lays down, curls up like dead
Waving hilarity away.
Their ludicrous display.

He is an alchemist of old,
Turning sad into gold.
Making from his own disaster,
Gold, of human laughter.

© Copyright 1999 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
RainbowGirl
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1 posted 10-26-1999 01:56 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Seymour: Brilliant..

HUGS

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RSEvans
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2 posted 10-26-1999 02:37 PM       View Profile for RSEvans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RSEvans

Very nice

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3 posted 10-26-1999 02:40 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Double thumbs up, Seymour... and then... sustained applause. Your poems are always a delightful read... but if I had to choose a favorite, this would be it!!!
Nan
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4 posted 10-26-1999 02:48 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

It's all really good, Sy - I like the last stanza best of all, though.....
Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 10-26-1999 06:28 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

RG,
Brilliant, hardly, but I love the sound of it. *L*
RSEvans,
Nice is nice, thank you.
Suthern,
To this I can only say, I love you too.
Nan,
I knew you would pick up on the gold. *L*
Watcher666
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6 posted 10-26-1999 08:42 PM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Excellent! Lovely read!

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Wonderful!

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Dr.Moose1
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8 posted 10-26-1999 09:36 PM       View Profile for Dr.Moose1   Email Dr.Moose1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dr.Moose1

Again, I really like the imagery here Seymour . One observation if I may . You sometimes seem almost too concise in getting your point across . With your obvious talent for words , perhaps you're cutting us short ?
Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 10-26-1999 10:06 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Watcher,
You can't beat excellent, thank you so much.
Denise,
Another treasure of praise, you are a dear.
Dr.Moose 1,
Very clever observation, it is one of my faults always afraid of being miss read.
I will work on it, thank you.
 
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