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Flattery: An Ode to Daddy

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wayoutwalt
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0 posted 10-25-1999 11:22 PM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for wayoutwalt

Daughter look up from three feet tall
And hear the rage in daddy's call
What's in your head? you keep playing!
Don't you hear what daddy's saying?

Daughter oh heed your daddy's call
He's twice over your three feet tall
You play with brothers shoot-shoot toys
Killing bad guys they're all just boys

Daughter please hear your daddys call
And note the wafting alcohol
Please do put down the shoot-shoot guns
And bid his call be on the run

Daughter playing in darkened hall
Pretends not hearing daddy's call
She hums a tune but sings it wrong
One of her daddy's drinking songs

© Copyright 1999 Walt Burns - All Rights Reserved
Poet deVine
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1 posted 10-25-1999 11:47 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Walt, nice to see you back! I felt a sadness reading this...Daddy doesn't know what effect he's having on this little girl..it's sad...... I liked it.
Mike
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2 posted 10-26-1999 12:08 AM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Nice to see ya again Walt..
yep... raising kids.. yep...
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3 posted 10-26-1999 12:11 AM       View Profile for Alicat   Email Alicat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alicat

Rough...very very rough, and, unfortunately, all too common in today's families. Very vivid and aptly portrayed WoW, with good use of childhood metaphors and names.


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Michael
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4 posted 10-26-1999 12:44 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Well you certainly haven't lost your touch, Walt. You certainly have been missed... This is a heartwrencher but only too true. Thank you.

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Michael Anderson

Is all that we see or seem
but a dream within a dream?


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5 posted 10-26-1999 01:49 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Glad I am to see you back walt.

Well told, of course, and indeed heartwrenching.

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Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvilŠ

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6 posted 10-26-1999 02:37 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Ikes, ditto's of the above...sad commentary!
wayoutwalt
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7 posted 10-26-1999 04:54 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

thanx guys for the vote of confidence was uninspired but o so wanted to join you guys again thanky yuh for all muh closest friends support yuh im tryin and is all one can do
Watcher666
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8 posted 10-26-1999 04:55 AM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Glad to see you back my friend! So sad a verse,and so true!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
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9 posted 10-26-1999 10:28 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Wonderful to read!

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Denise
 
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