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The Love Hypocrites

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Severn
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0 posted 10-25-1999 08:14 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Severn

(Run to the water…and find me there
burnt to the core, but not broken...Live)

He said:'I dare not call it love...
I would be fey should I tell you I loved you'
She said: '...that big, scary word...
I've learned about love the hard way'

Through measured certainty,
and weary-wisdomed craft,
emerged the searchings of these two:
he with questions to confound
and she with doubt affirmed

(...you are my mirror...)

Versing opinions passioned
through raging disputations,
flaunting rich sagacity
of fates and demons bold...
but slow inside
there flickered quiet
thoughts of minds
that did inspire

(...I am your echo...)

then, fluttered a candle-fire
now, burns the forest-flame
then, splashed a water-drop
now, falls the driving rain

And so soon the word it came!
And how soul-felt...

'you broke through, yet left no scar...
among the stars you are...
Love beckoned, irresistibly...
enduring past eternity...'

And now
these two surrendered souls
long days
live breathing for the other,
they send
true love down cold phone lines
crafting
words born from the other
and though
a cruel divide of time
mocks yet
the two Love Hypocrites
their bond
of minds and hearts alike
is safe
and never questioned

He said: 'Blue, my love for you, endless like the sky'
She said: 'you reside in me, Dove of my life, flight free'

Now they are just dreaming
but soon will they awaken:
these soulmates born
and soulmates found
the dove, and the star
forever bound...

25.10.99

[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 10-25-1999).]
© Copyright 1999 Kamla Mahony - All Rights Reserved
caroline
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1 posted 10-25-1999 08:35 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Ohhhh Severn...what a great piece this is! You've captured feelings and set them free all at once Stunning!

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"Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats

Christopher
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2 posted 10-25-1999 09:41 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Ok, I have to say that every single part of this is based on reality...and I am torn between groaning at having to eat my words, and bursting with pleasure and pride at this poem.
Of itself, it is magnificent, with all the right stops and punctuation to flow freely and easily. The word usage is quite powerful and hits home with every line.
But when added with the memories of personal experiences, (the italicised words are all quotes either from us, our poetry, or a shared song,) this becomes one of those peices that knocks one off their feet....
Amazed I am love, and you are truly, a shining star!
DreamEvil
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3 posted 10-25-1999 09:46 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Christopher, you were right as this is an awesome piece.

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Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©

Ohme
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4 posted 10-25-1999 09:53 PM       View Profile for Ohme   Email Ohme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ohme


Beautifuly done. Yep, Awesome,
Saxoness
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5 posted 10-25-1999 10:17 PM       View Profile for Saxoness   Email Saxoness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Saxoness

wow! Can I um, yanno, keep this one?

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"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot


Pepper
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6 posted 10-25-1999 10:18 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Thank you for sharing a glimpse of your love for each other. Very heartwarming indeed.
The poem is quite beautiful Severn.....

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A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extrordinaire!
Balladeer
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7 posted 10-25-1999 10:58 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Christopher, you don't treat this girl right and we're gonna kick yore butt!!! Beautiful work, Severn.
Watcher666
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8 posted 10-26-1999 04:36 AM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

This is absoulutely fabulous! So beautiful!!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
Dark Angel
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9 posted 10-26-1999 07:19 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

WOW Severn, this is fantastic!

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


RSEvans
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10 posted 10-26-1999 07:24 AM       View Profile for RSEvans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RSEvans

Have a tear...hell have two...Wonderful piece.

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No matter where you go, somebody's probably already been there and gotten the parking space...
Michael
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11 posted 10-26-1999 08:34 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Very well done, Severn. I can see how much work went into this piece.

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Michael Anderson

Is all that we see or seem
but a dream within a dream?


Poet deVine
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12 posted 10-26-1999 08:48 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Love does great things to an already good poet!! This is truly wonderful. You are both very lucky to have found each other....
hoot_owl_rn
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13 posted 10-26-1999 09:10 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Severn, this is fantastic....I can't wait till you two meet
Seymour Tabin
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14 posted 10-26-1999 11:51 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Severn,
Since all the superlatives were used up I can only add I liked it much. *L*
Severn
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15 posted 10-28-1999 03:14 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Wow - I just have to say thanks to all you guys!
I'm feeling very humbled right now (hard thing to achieve in me sometimes)

Chris - only you can truly know the significance of this and I'm so glad it touched your heart and you are ever my dove - my bringer of peace and hope.

angel - by all means! I'm just thrilled you would want to keep it!

Hoot - I can't wait till we meet!
 
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