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Iloveit
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0 posted 10-25-1999 05:12 PM       View Profile for Iloveit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Iloveit

I tried to write a poem
this weekend about you.
I started one about my need to touch you
to somehow make you real.
I wanted to write that I need to be near you
and soak in your presence
and how each day, I need a bit of you,
your laughter and your voices of reason,
but halfway through,
I gave up trying to explain this need of mine
for someone
who is my best friend
and it was off to the recycle bin.

ok a blank new page before me and so I started another
about how this weekend
was filled with thoughts of you
and how even washing the dishes
made me miss you.
I wondered what you were doing
and if you think of me too.
Halfway through, and it was just one more
missing you poem
and it was off to the recycle bin.

Next I tried to write one about my wanting
and how it defies reason,
how never having touched your skin
nor looked deep into your penetrating eyes,
my wanting you should have no substance.
there is no explaining how your voice
gives me shivers and comfort
and all at the same time
makes me want to kiss you…and
in the writing I realized I was right
and I was just putting my confusion on paper
for all to see….
and it was off to the recycle bin.

I finally thought to write a poem that says
I love you, cause, just maybe, I do…
but how do I know?
To say I love you to a stranger, really,
for I have never breathed the same air as you,
a man that every evening, lays his head down to sleep...miles away,
but in reality is an incredible friend,
defying distance and space;
I have never had one as close as you.
how would
you react to those three words
or better question,
how would I?
no answers come
and one with the press of a button
all my questions on love
are off to the recycle bin.

maybe its me that's not quite right.
if I could just edit out
my pain from the past,
and erase my fear of future heartache
and backspace those nagging doubts
and give me a tumble
through the recycle bin
with a fresh clean slate
this time I maybe I will take it nice and easy and
get it right.


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©1999 Iloveit



[This message has been edited by Iloveit (edited 10-25-1999).]
© Copyright 1999 Iloveit - All Rights Reserved
Watcher666
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1 posted 10-25-1999 05:20 PM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Liked this one.Nicely done!

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RainbowGirl
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2 posted 10-25-1999 05:26 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Iloveit: My friend - one doesn't need to share oxygen in order to know we breathe the same air, we share the same planet..

But I felt each word like a musician plays a score like a harpist strums each string...love is loving...

HUSG

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Iloveit
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3 posted 10-25-1999 05:29 PM       View Profile for Iloveit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Iloveit

thanks watcher

and RG I know, I feel your friendship and caring and you and I will never breathe the same air, and yes love is loving.....I like the way you say that
hoot_owl_rn
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4 posted 10-25-1999 05:32 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Been there, done that
Martie
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5 posted 10-25-1999 05:44 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

I loved the last stanza--the whole poem. I've often thought how nice it would be to get in with the wash and then tumble dry with bounce and come out all clean smelling and new.
Pepper
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6 posted 10-25-1999 06:12 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

I really like this poem Iloveit.
Nicely Done!..........

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Iloveit
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7 posted 10-25-1999 06:27 PM       View Profile for Iloveit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Iloveit

hoot yep, sigh, unfortunately its hard to put feelings into words and then into a poem that makes sense lol

thanks martie, and yep, use plenty of softener so we'd be smelling nice and plenty hugable

pepper thanks, glad you liked it, love your signature line, that is beautiful
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8 posted 10-25-1999 07:57 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I like this very much, Lovey!!! Well done!!!
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9 posted 10-25-1999 08:28 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Wonderful thought. Things can be so hard to put into words sometimes...even for writers. You described many thoughts excellently here.
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10 posted 10-25-1999 10:36 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is great lloveit! I enjoyed this very much and the ending was great!

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Denise
Iloveit
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11 posted 10-27-1999 09:58 AM       View Profile for Iloveit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Iloveit

thanks suthern, balladeer and denise glad you liked
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