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On Broken Wings (a Pantoum)

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hoot_owl_rn
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(I've borrowed some thoughts from some of my other poems for this one so it may sound a bit fimilar. I just thought it would make a good Pantoum)

On Broken Wings

She flies on broken wings
In clear pearlescent skies
With voice once mute she sings
Softly as she flies

In clear pearlescent skies
He feathers catch the sun
Softly as she flies
Released, her battles won

Her feathers catch the sun
Once caged, she’s been set free
Released, her battles won
His love it was the key

Once caged she’s been set free
Wings clipped, now given flight
His love it was the key
She’s drawn into his light

Wings clipped, now given flight
Their love can not be wrong
She’s drawn into his light
Her heart is filled with song

Their love can not be wrong
With voice once mute she sings
Her heart is filled with song
She flies on broken wings


To Tyson,
Thanks for giving me my voice again, being my song, and showing me how to fly. I love you darling.
Ruth




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This is courage...to bear unflinchingly what heaven sends. ~Eurpides
© Copyright 1999 Ruth Kephart - All Rights Reserved
Starith
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1 posted 10-24-1999 11:27 AM       View Profile for Starith   Email Starith   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Starith

Now a tribute like this just can't go without at least on reponse to it. This was truly beautiful Hoot. As always you have written a wonderful poem.

Star

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2 posted 10-24-1999 11:29 AM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Lovely Hoot! Liked this very much!!

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3 posted 10-24-1999 12:03 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Even though it's familiar, Hoot, it's still beautiful. And you're right, it does make a good pantoum. "She's drawn into his light, Her heart is given song" is a great way to describe what he's done to you. Best of luck to you both.

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."

"Something sweet, something sort of grandish, sweeps my soul when thou art near..."

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4 posted 10-24-1999 12:09 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Lovely Hoot!
How many days left now? So happy for you both!!


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A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
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I enjoyed reading this--well done!
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6 posted 10-24-1999 12:57 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Truly a lovely flight!

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Denise
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7 posted 10-24-1999 04:20 PM       View Profile for IsabelleSkye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for IsabelleSkye

This was beautiful. You expressed so well how someone's love can heal the hurts.
I know that well! Good Luck my friend.
I.Skye

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"With love's light wings did I o'er-perch these walls; for stony limits cannot hold love out; and what love can do that dares love attempt." Romeo & Juliet Act II
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8 posted 10-24-1999 04:25 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Ruth, this is truly beautiful best of luck to both of you

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


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9 posted 10-24-1999 05:06 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Sighs and smiles! This was lovely, Ruth; I have to say that my favorite line was:

"Her feathers catch the sun"

I could see you soaring! Well done!

--Kess

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10 posted 10-24-1999 05:50 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Lady Hoot: The cake is only as good as the ingredients and the cook… a finer pastry could not be made. Thanks for the treat.
hoot_owl_rn
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Everyone, thank you for your kind response to this one

Pepper....10 days now

Sir Andrew...thank you for the kind words, greatly appreciated
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12 posted 10-24-1999 07:29 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Hoot this is stunningly beautiful You've made me know how it feels to fly!



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"Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats

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Wow, that was gorgeous! I find that particular style very interesting too. Well done!
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Ruth your talent is expanding! EXQUISITE piece you've put together here! Enjoyed it!
starchild
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15 posted 10-25-1999 06:55 AM       View Profile for starchild   Email starchild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for starchild

the frst and las verses were the best verse i have read on this site.

SHE FLIES WITH BROKEN WINGS

if i had wrote that i would have brought me flowers
Munda
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16 posted 10-25-1999 08:51 AM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

As always...beautiful !
JennyLee
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17 posted 10-25-1999 09:16 AM       View Profile for JennyLee   Email JennyLee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JennyLee

She flies on broken wings...another really good one Hoot.

Jenny
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Thank you everyone
johnt300
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19 posted 10-26-1999 02:41 AM       View Profile for johnt300   Email johnt300   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for johnt300

Hi Ruth,
Forgive me for getting to this so late. It couldn't be helped as you know. This is a beautiful poem. Thank you very much for it. How many days now? Until then...
Tyson
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20 posted 10-26-1999 02:49 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Clapping very loudly here Hoot!
Bravo!
Nan
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Isn't it just astounding what a bit of inspiration can do for us?
hoot_owl_rn
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Nan, yes it is, thank you

Christopher, thanks a lot

Tyson, I know dear, thank you and 8 days
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I see good skills here, I see were you are coming from. However, I can't help but connect it with the song line, " Black bird singing in the dead of night. Take these broken wings and learn to fly." Nether the less I still find it good reading and it leaves be thinking abot it... I like that.
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