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Purloined Innocence

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Systematic Decay
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0 posted 10-24-1999 02:19 AM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Systematic Decay

In the depths of onyx eyes
A stagnant swamp forever lies
It beheld the minutes turned to years
Watched the smiles mask the tears
And added lilting laughter to it all

In a heart ridden with murk
Sickening motives and methods do lurk
Memories of a spiraling decadence
With a prize of purloined innocence
She was held close, a bittersweet gall

But what does the mirror now reflect?
A being devoid of pride and respect
All hope as vapid as clouds in the sky
A worthlessness she just can't deny
Hiding and exhibiting impurity

And in the shadows of a broken mind
Perhaps she thought that she would find
A life long slave, among other things
By holding me and clipping my wings
But I am now laughing, soaring and free

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-


[This message has been edited by Systematic Decay (edited 10-24-1999).]
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Watcher666
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1 posted 10-24-1999 03:01 AM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Well done. Liked this very much.!!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
DreamEvil
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2 posted 10-24-1999 04:18 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Glad to see you here tonight with such wondrous verse, my friend.

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Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvilŠ

RainbowGirl
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3 posted 10-24-1999 04:44 AM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Well done...loved the last three lines..

HUGS

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.

hoot_owl_rn
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Well done systematic....I could see a few places where a nip and tuck would serve well to perfect the meter, but over all an terrific piece.
Pepper
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Another Well Done Sys!.......

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
Denise
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6 posted 10-24-1999 01:37 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

You seem to have a depth of wisdom and a talent for writing that belies your youth!
I am impressed with your writings and I believe this is one of my favorites!

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Denise
Martie
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7 posted 10-24-1999 01:54 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

You did well in evoking the dark and moody and then the last lines freed the feeling. Well done.
Systematic Decay
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8 posted 10-24-1999 10:11 PM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Systematic Decay

Thank you, everybody for all the replies.

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-
 
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