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Thank you, my deceiver

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Skyfyre
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0 posted 10-23-1999 07:11 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Skyfyre

Thank you, my deceiver,
For opening my eyes;
You paved the path into my heart
With finely-crafted lies.

You made me a believer;
Convinced me I could love --
Enwrapped me in the silken strands
That dreams are fashioned of.

I never thought to question
This delicate control;
Your hands had known my body,
Your heart had claimed my soul.

Perhaps you never loved me,
Your feelings were a lie;
Regardless, they have changed me
In ways I can't deny.

Though I no longer want you,
Your touch renewed my heart --
I've gathered up the pieces
And made a hopeful start.

I guess I should be bitter
At the treatment I've received:
But who has gained the most, I ask:
Deceiver -- or deceived?

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You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.
© Copyright 1999 Linda Anderson - All Rights Reserved
Julie
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1 posted 10-23-1999 07:24 PM       View Profile for Julie   Email Julie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Julie

Well done and well stated...

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Julie
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Almost all our misfortunes in life come from the wrong notions we have about the things that happen to us.
>Stendhal


RSEvans
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2 posted 10-23-1999 07:30 PM       View Profile for RSEvans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RSEvans

Well put. When saying better to have loved and lost, keep in mind that without both you would have known neither.

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On the wings of day-bright dreams...

Denise
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3 posted 10-23-1999 07:36 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Excellent Skyfrye! I enjoyed this!

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Denise
Skyfyre
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4 posted 10-23-1999 07:45 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Thank you ...
Kitty**
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5 posted 10-23-1999 07:48 PM       View Profile for Kitty**   Email Kitty**   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Kitty**'s Home Page   View IP for Kitty**

This was great..I've felt the same way!!
You stated it very well.

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Kitty**
hoot_owl_rn
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6 posted 10-23-1999 08:20 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Excellent!! Not only was the subject matter well expressed, but also your meter and rhyme are absolutely perfect. One suggestion.....get this one out to a publisher. If you need an idea, e-mail me and I'll give you the name of one I can assure you will take this piece.
Watcher666
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7 posted 10-23-1999 08:26 PM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Well done. Liked this much!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
DreamEvil
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8 posted 10-23-1999 08:51 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Excellently written piece this is and well can I empathize with it.

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Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvilŠ

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9 posted 10-23-1999 09:06 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Better than excellent. Superbly crafted with substance.
Skyfyre
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10 posted 10-23-1999 10:09 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Many thanks ... your words are the wine that intoxicates this poor poet's soul.

--K.
Starith
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11 posted 10-23-1999 11:52 PM       View Profile for Starith   Email Starith   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Starith

Very nicely done. You will go far here I think.

Star

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We are only truly apperciated after we are no more!

Systematic Decay
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12 posted 10-24-1999 02:29 AM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Systematic Decay

Excellent poem. I think you should take hoot up on her offer...this is just great...and hits home with me.

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-
ThUnDeRkYsS
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13 posted 10-24-1999 04:01 AM       View Profile for ThUnDeRkYsS   Email ThUnDeRkYsS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ThUnDeRkYsS

Unfortunately, this is too often the case. We think we know love, but then find out some way or another that it is just a game. It hurts, and there is no way to prepare for the pain.
RainbowGirl
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14 posted 10-24-1999 04:48 AM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Hmmmm...the deceived I think, for they usually try to rise above..

HUGS

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.

Pepper
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15 posted 10-24-1999 11:18 AM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Masterfully done!! An excellent piece!!

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
Martie
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16 posted 10-24-1999 05:14 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

More wine for your soul from me. This was so very well done. We gain so many lessons from the pain we feel. I say the deceived wins.
Skyfyre
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17 posted 10-24-1999 05:24 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

"Inebriate of air am I,
And debauche of dew;
Reeling through endless summer days
From inns of molten blue."

--Dickinson, "I taste a liquor never brewed"

I am truly drunk on all these responses -- thank you all so much!

-- Kesslynne

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You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.
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