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vandana
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0 posted 1999-10-23 05:56 PM


My love, after all we've been through,
After all we've said and done,
After all we've been through
You tell me to leave you,
After all we've been through,
Time has come to go our sperate ways,
Don't know what and where we did go wrong,
What I've done to hurt you,
After all these years,
You were so dearto me,
But now we we've to go our sperate ways,
After all we've been through,
Wishinh I could say the truth to you,
But you never give me chance to say,
After all we've been so close,
And never said we would part,
But now time had come
To break our hearts,
Time has come to go on sperate ways,
After all we've been through,
Still and will love you more,
After all we've been through,

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Watcher666
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since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606

1 posted 1999-10-23 06:07 PM


Good poem,but you need to change a few of your line breaks and spelling.Flow's a little choppy.If you'd like help let me know.

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