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The Rain Outside My Window Falls (my way of getting things off my mind. enjoy)

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Starith
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0 posted 10-22-1999 11:49 PM       View Profile for Starith   Email Starith   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Starith

As the rain outside my window falls
My thoughts walk through unseen halls

Behind the doors with in my mind
Unimaginable fears churn and grind

Fears of love lost and gone
Fears of waking alone in the dawn

My thoughts turn down another corridor
I can feel myself held in your arms once more

You hold me tight and kiss my lips
My eyes closed tight but one tear slips

I wake from this dream, staining my cheeks are tears
I gasp for breath as my hope is choked away by fears

In the darkness silence calls
As the rain outside my window falls

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We are only truly apperciated after we are no more!

© Copyright 1999 Starith - All Rights Reserved
Michael
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1 posted 10-23-1999 12:04 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Very cool imagery...I love this.

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Michael Anderson

Is all that we see or seem
but a dream within a dream?



Dark Angel
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2 posted 10-23-1999 12:09 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

cool imagery indeed Starith, loved it also

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Watcher666
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3 posted 10-23-1999 04:33 AM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Enjoy I did! Well done!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
hoot_owl_rn
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since 07-05-99
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Glen Hope, PA USA


4 posted 10-23-1999 10:46 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

So sad
Trynete
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since 09-01-99
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5 posted 10-23-1999 10:51 AM       View Profile for Trynete   Email Trynete   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Trynete's Home Page   View IP for Trynete

{CLAP CLAP} WOW!!! (tear drop) You most certainly have rather true and rare talent. Excellent job, man I admire YOU!!!

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To live is to love, and to love is to live... the meaning of life.
Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 10-23-1999 11:24 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Starith,
Enjoyed the read.
Starith
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since 08-18-99
Posts 181
Leesburg, FL USA


7 posted 10-23-1999 01:36 PM       View Profile for Starith   Email Starith   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Starith

Wow! I never expected to have this many replies when I signed on this morning. Thank you all.

Micheal: I still can't believe that you find my poems interesting and worth your praise. I am glad that they touch you as they do.

Dark Angel: Thank you I'm glad that you enjoyed this.

Watcher: Thank you also!

Hoot: I did not mean for this to make you sad I'm so sorry that I did. I had to get things off my mind, not meant to be sad at all.

Trynete: I am glad you enjoyed this. Thank you.

Seymour: Thank you also.

You guys are gonna fill my head with the crazy idea that I'm good at this or something..LOL. Thank you all again.

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We are only truly apperciated after we are no more!

Skyfyre
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since 08-15-99
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Sitting in Michael's Lap


8 posted 10-23-1999 01:46 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

I love the rain ...

For that reason alone, this poem is well worth the read. However, there are many other reasons why I had to read it several times over, relishing it more each time. My favorite of all is how you began and ended with the same line: it completed the image of the mind wandering, then coming back to reality. I am impressed!

--Kesslynne

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You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.
Emmy
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9 posted 10-23-1999 01:53 PM       View Profile for Emmy   Email Emmy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Emmy's Home Page   View IP for Emmy

WOW! That was too cool! I love the amazing imagery; you've captured a wandering mind perfectly. You've got talent!
Skyfyre
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10 posted 10-23-1999 01:53 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

My friend, you just keep getting better and better. You'd better stop that ... you know I don't like competition!

Though I have already told you how much I love this, allow me to reiterate: I LOVE THIS!

Nocht

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"Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus"
(Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.")

Starith
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since 08-18-99
Posts 181
Leesburg, FL USA


11 posted 10-23-1999 02:42 PM       View Profile for Starith   Email Starith   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Starith

Thank you all so very much. Boy oh boy it seems I did well on this one.

Skyfyre: I am impressed myself. Impressed by the fact that my poetry could envoke such a reaction from anyone. I am overwhelmed thank you.

Emmy: Thank you very much. I'm so glad that you liked this.

Nocht: Dear friend I'd never dream of giving you competition...LOL. Thank you for your reply...you know I hold your thoughts of my work very high. Thank you again my friend.

Star

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We are only truly apperciated after we are no more!

RainbowGirl
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12 posted 10-23-1999 05:51 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

The sound and sight of rain can evoke so many memories..

HUGS

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.

Starith
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Posts 181
Leesburg, FL USA


13 posted 10-24-1999 12:11 AM       View Profile for Starith   Email Starith   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Starith

Very true Rainbow. I love the rain. It helps me to unwind.

Thank you all again for your wonerful praise.

Star

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We are only truly apperciated after we are no more!


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