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Marilyn
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0 posted 10-22-1999 11:01 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Marilyn

Where have all my feelings gone?
Cold winds blasting.
Where have all my feelings gone?
Gone, gone away.

In my heart, no words can stir,
Those warmest feelings.
I do truely long for them.
Gone, gone away.

I am lost no one can find,
My deepest recess.
My heart is cold, alone to die.
Gone, gone away.

Heat they try to light anew,
A hopeless pass time.
Emotionless to any cue.
Gone, gone away.

I must face the barest truth,
Love's light passing.
Alone again to struggle through.
Gone, gone away.

This heart is cold, forever lost,
No time burning.
Turned to stone, no more to cry.
Gone, gone away.
© Copyright 1999 Marilyn - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 10-22-1999 11:06 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

How sad this is Marilyn. It seemed like a song that has played in my heart before. You really captured the mood of dispair.
Marilyn
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2 posted 10-22-1999 11:13 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Martie.....This is how I am feeling. I tried in several forms to express how I am feeling now. I failed and ranted in prose. Then I stumbled upon this and it just flowed from my mind and my heart.
Balladeer
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3 posted 10-22-1999 11:21 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Marilyn, I'm really sorry you are feeling this way. You have too many good qualities to give up hope. Please reconsider.
Denise
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4 posted 10-22-1999 11:26 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very well done, Marilyn. Great expression of emptiness, of loosing those special feelings for someone. This says it all and very well.

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Denise
Marilyn
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5 posted 10-22-1999 11:31 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

My dear Balladeer. Hope I always have but reality is where I live. I shall always hope and dream but it the reality of love I wish to taste. I have forgotten how to feel my friend.

Denise..Thankyou.
Watcher666
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6 posted 10-23-1999 04:22 AM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Look inside your heart,you'll find the embers there still.Just build it slowly and a roaring fire you'll soon have.Well done verse.

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
Marilyn
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7 posted 10-23-1999 08:59 AM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Watcher.....I hope you are right my friend. The coldness is difficult to deal with. I am naturally a warm person and this nothingness I feel is depressing.
Richard 33
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8 posted 10-23-1999 04:16 PM       View Profile for Richard 33   Email Richard 33   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Richard 33

Good heart felt words, good poem, I have felt this way before, ya just got to keep believing, especially in yourself!!!!!
PoeticPreacher
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9 posted 10-23-1999 04:29 PM       View Profile for PoeticPreacher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit PoeticPreacher's Home Page   View IP for PoeticPreacher

Hats off to you sistah for being real. This is a well written word. Your hope has been deferred and it has made you heart sick. For encouragement, I leave with you a piece from my favorite poet...David

Hope deferred makes the heart sick: but when the desire comes...it is a tree of life.
Proverbs 13:12

Luv Ya Marilyn
Marilyn
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10 posted 10-24-1999 02:56 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Richard....Thankyou for you words, I will try to live them.


Preacher.....Real is all I know how to be. thankyou for the words of David. There are times when one just forgets or can not see through the darkness. I look for the desire to come friend.
DanMc
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11 posted 10-24-1999 03:15 PM       View Profile for DanMc   Email DanMc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DanMc's Home Page   View IP for DanMc

I,m speachless

i wish u all the happiness in the world

PS / when you have no faith in love
/ look for faith in God
/ God is love
God will never give to much that you may not bear, even when you feel like he is not there
Read the poem called footprints I do all the time, I have gone to three funerals in the past two years , my father , my grandfather and now this summer my uncle all which were dear to me .God has been there for me .he is there for you now.

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Daniel McIntosh
Marilyn
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12 posted 10-24-1999 07:39 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Dan..thankyou for your kind words. I have a deep faith in God and it has gotten me through many rough times. This is something I just have to get through. Time is what I need I guess. Again thanks for you time and your comments.
Pepper
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13 posted 10-25-1999 04:55 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Such a heartfelt piece!
Marilyn, I have no words of wisdom befitting, but I do hope you find the part of you that will make you feel warm again.

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A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extrordinaire!
sparrow
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14 posted 10-25-1999 04:59 PM       View Profile for sparrow   Email sparrow   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit sparrow's Home Page   View IP for sparrow

Reminds me of that old song "Where have all the cowboys gone" at the first, then turns into a wonderful and emotional work of art.

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Marilyn
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15 posted 10-25-1999 05:57 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

pepper...gosh how far back did you have to go to retrieve this? I was surprised to see it on page one again. Thankyou for taking the time to find it and comment.

Sparrow...It was written with the song "Where have all the flowers gone." in mind. I was having trouble putting my soul into words and when my mind happened on this song it flowed beautifully.
hoot_owl_rn
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16 posted 10-26-1999 04:49 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

So sad Marilyn, I know what it feels like to be there. My thoughts and prayers are with you.
Hugs
Ruth
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17 posted 10-26-1999 06:35 PM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Systematic Decay

Marilyn,I know how your feeling. There was a time when I never thought I'd feel anything again. Give it time. That worked for me.

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-
Munda
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18 posted 10-26-1999 07:28 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

So sad, Marilyn. I hope the sun will shine for you again very soon.
Verma
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19 posted 10-26-1999 07:42 PM       View Profile for Verma   Email Verma   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Verma

The words you speak, They make me feel weak...Thanks for sharing this one..
Alwye
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20 posted 10-26-1999 09:13 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Deeply sad and moving..I can relate to this..wonderful, wonderful job.

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*Krista Knutson*

I walk with the multitude, yet alone am I in their midst. -- Daniel L. Miller


Marilyn
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21 posted 10-26-1999 10:41 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Ruth...Your prayers are greatly appreciated. Thankyou for being a friend.

Amy...Time is something I have given much of to this problem, years. I need to be able to trust and I do not know how to do that. I am always looking for the shoe to drop and I hold back. I wish to learn how to change that part of me.


Munda..thankyou for your kind words.

Verma.....I am glad that this touched you.

Alwye....Way too many people can relate to this piece. This says a lot about our society. This must change!

[This message has been edited by Marilyn (edited 10-26-1999).]
Isis
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22 posted 10-27-1999 08:20 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Well done Marilyn. I know this feeling of nothingless too, it's just not you and there is nothing you can do. Just try to see the beauty around you, in people, in nature, in life etc. This piece spoke of my own similar feelings in times past.

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How long after you are gone will ripples remain as evidence that you were cast into the pool?
~Isis~
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I know how this feels
 
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