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starchild
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since 1999-10-22
Posts 59
manchester, england

0 posted 1999-10-22 12:24 PM


the world conspired against our love, my love my angel devil child
your velvet soft and heavy eyes
and my thoughts touched on your desires
we ran down to the ocean, in search of eden
we found each other by the shore
strange emotions in the darkness that was hot like the waves that called us in
and our blood filled lips ready to carress our body
down we went our insane body
a world away from jealous eyes and sleeping now
sleeping slowly and gently
we could never be this way out there

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Julie Jordan Scott
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since 1999-09-19
Posts 146
Bakersfield, CA USA
1 posted 1999-10-22 12:42 PM


Eloquently spoken with relatively few words....they dance on the page, delighting the senses, I can see vividly the picture you paint.

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tori
Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520
Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA
2 posted 1999-10-22 01:17 PM


I totaly agree with JJS... this is picture perfect and if you would not mind I've got a place for this one my friend.. !!
Watcher666
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since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606

3 posted 1999-10-22 03:19 PM


Great imagery here...liked this much!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
4 posted 1999-10-23 10:17 AM


I liked the imagery in this piece a lot
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