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Trynete
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since 09-01-99
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Cape Cod, MA


0 posted 10-22-1999 12:08 PM       View Profile for Trynete   Email Trynete   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Trynete's Home Page   View IP for Trynete

I have NO idea what to title this or how to end it, please pleeeeeeeeeeeaze can some1 help me??!!!!?

I have eyes,
but I cannot see.
I have a heart,
but it does bleed.
I have a pulse,
but it does not beat.
I have hands,
but I cannot touch.
I have legs,
but I cannot walk.
I have a tongue,
but I cannot talk.
I have ears,
but I cannot hear.
I have tears,
but I cannot cry.
I have a mouth,
but I cannot eat.
I have a nose,
but I cannot breathe.
I have a mind,
but I do not understand.

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To live is to love, and to love is to live... the meaning of life.
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Systematic Decay
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since 09-15-99
Posts 1312
That place with padded walls a


1 posted 10-22-1999 01:45 PM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Systematic Decay

I can't think of any good titles. However,I think the ending was fine just the way it is.

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-
Watcher666
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since 10-13-1999
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2 posted 10-22-1999 03:23 PM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

I agree with Sys....ends well,but can't help with a title

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
Marilyn
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since 09-26-1999
Posts 2646
Ontario, Canada


3 posted 10-22-1999 03:50 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

I too think it ends fine. As for a title...Can Not....or I Have.
Nan
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Cape Cod Massachusetts USA


4 posted 10-22-1999 09:13 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Hey, my special friend - How about "I Have Not..."?

[This message has been edited by Nan (edited 10-22-1999).]
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