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My Utopia (challenge from Sunshine)

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DreamEvil
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0 posted 10-22-1999 03:33 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Against my back is an ancient Elm,
towering into the sky.
From comfort I gaze across my realm,
it's beauty making me sigh.

Many leaves spread from it's gentle boughs,
enveloping me in shade.
I bask in the comfort it allows,
dwelling on the peace I've made.

I sit upon this grass covered hill,
inhaling the clean, fresh air.
Sunset is such an uncommon thrill,
I can do nothing but stare.

Nature's hues are soothing to my gaze,
calming my feverish mind.
I am content to live out my days,
within this peace I did find.

Upon the hill's foot lies a crystal lake,
reflecting a deeper blue.
Pristine water my worries does take,
all concerns I will eschew.

Sparkling sunshine seems almost mystic,
borne upon each rippling wave.
The world itself seems surrealistic,
granting the peace that I crave.

The wind fills my ears with rustling leaves,
quite a symphony of sound.
A caress of air about me weaves,
teasing me with what I've found.

In the distance a voice calls my name,
desperately calling me home.
To my sanity's grip some do lay claim,
for now though I wish to roam.

Peace spills from life's cornucopia,
to that fact I was once blind.
I have found my own utopia,
hidden inside of my mind.


©1999 DreamEvil


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Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©

© Copyright 1999 DreamEvil - All Rights Reserved
Christopher
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1 posted 10-22-1999 03:40 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Wow brother! This is so filled with grace and beauty, that I am stunned. Indeed, it is not what I would have expected, though I must admit to not being surprised...too much! LOL... I have known for quite some time now that there was a lot of beauty in your heart. A fact which you so eloquently prve with your expression here.
Indeed, as the poet you are, your Utopia seems quite fitting. You breathe the life and beauty, (or darkness,) into your words. So why not find solace there as well?
A challenge VERY well met in my op!
(and perhaps a very wise message to others in search of happiness.)
Chris
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2 posted 10-22-1999 03:57 AM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Systematic Decay

This poem made me smile just reading it....

Although I've never seen you, I can picture leaning against the giant tree, looking on at this peaceful world....my minds "camera position," so to say, even changed with each new stanza....I only hope I can one day achieve this in my writing. Thank you Scott, for gracing the forum with a poem so vividly beautiful.

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-


[This message has been edited by Systematic Decay (edited 10-22-1999).]
Marilyn
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3 posted 10-22-1999 07:48 AM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Wonderfully done Sir. I knew that your diversity would thrill me. You have met the challenge and surpassed my expectations. Bravo my friend.
thursdayschild
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4 posted 10-22-1999 07:59 AM       View Profile for thursdayschild   Email thursdayschild   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for thursdayschild

Truly love this wonderful piece (peace!)
What a glorious place discovered...
Thanks for sharing this
Pepper
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5 posted 10-22-1999 09:55 AM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Stunning DE! What a beautiful place you took us to in this poem!!

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
hoot_owl_rn
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6 posted 10-22-1999 12:38 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

This is beautiful Dream, may we all be so fortunate to find ours and the peace that goes with it
Ohme
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7 posted 10-22-1999 12:45 PM       View Profile for Ohme   Email Ohme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ohme


Beautifully done, DreamEvil. And don't we all need somewhere to go for our peace.
Soulds like a nice place to visit.

Ohme
Julie Jordan Scott
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8 posted 10-22-1999 12:57 PM       View Profile for Julie Jordan Scott   Email Julie Jordan Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Julie Jordan Scott's Home Page   View IP for Julie Jordan Scott

Vivid imagery, deep yet soft emotion. It seems in this work contentment has been found.

I can feel it flowing through my veins just from reading your words.

THANKS!

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Julie Jordan Scott is a Freelance Writer and Public Speaker,
but her favorite role is that of Mommy! Visit her website at
http://www.5passions.com
Watcher666
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9 posted 10-22-1999 03:18 PM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Oh Word Master....I can see the vivid scene your words have painted here.Tranquility.gentleness and peace.......beautiful and powerful!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
RainbowGirl
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10 posted 10-22-1999 07:59 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Peaceful..

Hugs

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.

Bashful
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11 posted 10-22-1999 08:14 PM       View Profile for Bashful   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bashful

I...ummmm...errr...gosh....it.....ahhhh...ohhh...yeah...*blushing blood red and returning to my corner*
Michael
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12 posted 10-22-1999 08:31 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Wow! Dream, this one took me totally by surprize. Seems you've had some deep thoughts of late too. I am amazed and awed, my father taught me of Utopia before he died, but I never thought of it being within a person's mind...very thought provoking.

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Michael Anderson

Is all that we see or seem
but a dream within a dream?



DreamEvil
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13 posted 10-23-1999 01:02 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

This piece holds special meaning for me, so thank you for every comment.

Sunshine, is your challenge met?

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Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©

Poet deVine
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14 posted 10-23-1999 01:36 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I remember your very first post here at Passions...unformatted and filled with angry, emotional images....as I read this, I am amazed at your progression as a poet.. you have taken your natural talent and expanded it to greater heights than I imagined possible. I like the trend you are setting, being able to put yourself into someone's shoes and write for someone. This poem is exquisite. No other words are necessary.
Skyfyre
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15 posted 10-23-1999 02:15 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

"Sunset is such an uncommon thrill"

Spoken like a man truly at peace. I enjoyed this immensely. Tell me -- do you have a spare Utopia lying around somewhere I can borrow?

--Kess

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You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.
Sunshine
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16 posted 10-23-1999 05:12 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

I will keep this close, DE, and pray that your future holds many days of peace for you - because you DO know where to find them.

Bravo Sir - Bravo.
Alwye
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17 posted 10-23-1999 09:36 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Wow Dream, wow....I am in awe...your words have described my own utopia better than I've ever done..gorgeous work.

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*Krista Knutson*

I walk with the multitude, yet alone am I in their midst. -- Daniel L. Miller

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