How to Join Member's Area Private Library Search Today's Topics p Login
Main Forums Discussion Tech Talk Mature Content Archives
   Nav Win
 Archives
 Open Poetry #3 Archive
 Who Will Be King
 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11
Follow us on Facebook

 This is an Archive. You may post a reply, but new topics are not allowed.

 
User Options
Format for Better Printing EMail to a Friend Create a Greeting Card with this Poem
Admin Print Send ECard
Passions in Poetry

Who Will Be King ( With Reluctance)

 Post A Reply   Go to the Next Oldest/Previous Topic Return to Topic Page Go to the Next Newest Topic 
Dr.Moose1
Member Elite
since 09-05-99
Posts 3505
Bewilderment , USA


0 posted 10-21-1999 08:21 PM       View Profile for Dr.Moose1   Email Dr.Moose1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Dr.Moose1

Wary of ill-fated choices
Hold fast to inner voices wrath
Only those slated to do gallant deeds , lo
Will seek the path of valiant Zulu

In fire of truth face fear denial
Laughter springs from crises passed
Lesser hero's fears exiled , I
Battle fate of haste judgements cast

'Ere await dark minions mob
Klinging doubts thrust far aside
If mere power of thought hath built this realm.
No breach of such will I abide

Grant me the yoke of benevolence ?

Oracles speak of where I follow
Night hides sorrow of deeds un-done , I
Long for the freshest steed on the morrow, still
Yearn victory's cup to swallow from , will...

All foes vanquished from the past
Form ranks with those un-met yet near
One last go with no regrets may
Often shed more than blood or tears ,at...

Light's last waning rays I'll go
As reining days sleep soon forever
Still with-in my heart I've known,Valiant Zulu
Marching ever remaining tall

Even though my worth I cannot prove


------------------
Sometimes nonsense isn't .
© Copyright 1999 William E.Kleist - All Rights Reserved
Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 08-22-99
Posts 23002


1 posted 10-21-1999 10:39 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is great! I loved it!

------------------
Denise
Pepper
Member Elite
since 08-19-99
Posts 3134
Southern Florida

Official Passions Reader
2 posted 10-21-1999 10:50 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Well Done.....this piece I enjoyed much Dr. Moose.......

------------------

May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
Dr.Moose1
Member Elite
since 09-05-99
Posts 3505
Bewilderment , USA


3 posted 10-22-1999 10:33 AM       View Profile for Dr.Moose1   Email Dr.Moose1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dr.Moose1

Thank you both , This double acrostic started out to be something else , and then kind of had it's way with me
Watcher666
Senior Member
since 10-13-1999
Posts 1630


4 posted 10-22-1999 03:09 PM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Liked this much!

------------------
Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
Marilyn
Member Elite
since 09-26-1999
Posts 2646
Ontario, Canada


5 posted 10-22-1999 03:20 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Wonderfully done Dr. I look forward to more of your work.
Dr.Moose1
Member Elite
since 09-05-99
Posts 3505
Bewilderment , USA


6 posted 10-22-1999 04:09 PM       View Profile for Dr.Moose1   Email Dr.Moose1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dr.Moose1

Watcher and Marilyn ,
Thanks for the comments . much appreciated .
Craig
Senior Member
since 06-10-99
Posts 882


7 posted 10-22-1999 07:39 PM       View Profile for Craig   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Craig


Well written Acrostic, thanks for not announcing it in the title it's much better to find out on your own.

( Or to be told later and feel a fool for missing it! I saw the acrostic in this but missed the double by being thrown by the excellent use of the question mark )
.
Well done DOUBLE!

------------------
Yes, I admit your general rule. That every poet is a fool:
But I myself may serve to show it. That every fool is not a poet.


Michael
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 08-13-99
Posts 6333
California


8 posted 10-22-1999 08:38 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Nothing to be reluctant about here, Dr.
Very well done...and I can appreciate the difficulty involved in a piece such as this.

------------------
Michael Anderson

Is all that we see or seem
but a dream within a dream?



Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 08-22-99
Posts 23002


9 posted 10-22-1999 08:39 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Wow! Am I embarrassed! Me, the lover of acrostics! Me, the one who usually reads down the left side first! And a double no less! I was carried away by the beauty of the text and didn't even notice! What can I say but MOST EXCELLENT!

------------------
Denise
RainbowGirl
Member Elite
since 07-31-99
Posts 3167
United Kingdom


10 posted 10-22-1999 08:46 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

All men are kings until they lose their kingdoms...but I doubt many are fools..

HUGS

------------------
You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.

Dr.Moose1
Member Elite
since 09-05-99
Posts 3505
Bewilderment , USA


11 posted 10-23-1999 08:41 AM       View Profile for Dr.Moose1   Email Dr.Moose1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dr.Moose1

Craig, Michael, dsnyder, Rainbow,
Thanks for the reviews , I must admit that I am flattered . Having read some of your works makes your comments more meaningful.
And, I'll also admit to not announcing it ,
to see who would pick it up right away.
 
 Post A Reply   Go to the Next Oldest/Previous Topic Return to Topic Page Go to the Next Newest Topic 
All times are ET (US) Top
  User Options
>> Archives >> Open Poetry #3 >> Who Will Be King Format for Better Printing EMail to a Friend Create a Greeting Card with this Poem
Print Send ECard

 

pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Today's Topics | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary



© Passions in Poetry and netpoets.com 1998-2013
All Poetry and Prose is copyrighted by the individual authors