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This Inevitable Morning

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Martie
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The sun has turned the sky white
and made all outlines sharp.
Seeking out the shadows it lingers
in all the dark corners
and cold spots.
The dark forbidden place
of mushrooms brightens,
the snake sleeps in the plain sight,
the Black Widow has left her home,
the Hibiscus opens
bows its head
then folds into death.
The crow’s laughter fills the air.

In the back room the shade is pulled
but around the edges and through
the tiny pin prick of a whole
in the middle
the sun beams
exposing a dust ball in the corner
and a stain on the carpet
in the middle of that perfect pink rose.

© Copyright 1999 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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Wow Martie, this is absolutely packed full of imagery...nicely written. I do, by the way, love thse three lines...supurb!
"the Hibiscus opens
bows its head
then folds into death."


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Martie,
Good paint, good lines, well done.
PhaerieChild
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The visuals on this were right there!! Very good read!

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4 posted 10-22-1999 12:09 PM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Excellent read.Vivid imagery.

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