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I Love You Said Too Late

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hoot_owl_rn
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0 posted 10-21-1999 11:18 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

I can still recall each moment of that morning

Lying there beside you, your hand against my leg; I was
Overcome by such a feeling of belonging that I couldn’t express.
Visions of the night before, all still fresh in my mind.
Even as you got up to leave, my words, however, failed me.

You turned to me, said those three words and I merely smiled. If
Only I could have said them too, maybe you would have
Understood, that I never really wanted you to go.

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This is courage...to bear unflinchingly what heaven sends. ~Eurpides
© Copyright 1999 Ruth Kephart - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 10-21-1999 11:37 AM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Lady Hoot: I felt a profound sense of loneliness in this one. If that is the emotion you sought to capture, you did well mi'lady. However, I'm left with the notion that it was the person leaving that said those words too late. Yes? No? Perhaps if said still in bed, the recipient would have never let the other depart.
hoot_owl_rn
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Sir Andrew...yes, I meant to portray a sense of loneliness with this piece (although not my state of mind). The person leaving did say those three words, the person staying, could not...thus the person leaving, felt rejected and left. Had the person stayiing said those three words when the person leaving got up to go, he may have never left. About as clear as mud now, LOL, I even got myself confused on that explanation. Oh, I do so hate it when I have to explain a poem, to me it means my words were not effective. This poem is about regrets, about not saying things when one should, about loss and how sometimes so simply we could have prevented it. Wow, that was a mouthful.
By the way, this is an acrostic if you didn't notice
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3 posted 10-21-1999 11:55 AM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Lady Hoot: Your poem truly needed no explanation... When I first read it, I understood the situation that the one in bed spoke to late (not at all in fact)... but I was unwilling to take it at face value and was looking for something deeper... sometimes a book is just a book... and by the way... who is on first? Nope! didn't catch it until you pointed it out... must be blind this morning. A great job all the same. Have a good day!
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I love this one Hoot. I know that feeling, of not saying what you should, when you should. Sometimes though, we are given the chance to say it later and all is well.
Martie
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I could be wrong in this situation (I am wrong quite often) but seems to me it's never too late to say I love you. I do understand what you meant though. You did this well.
hoot_owl_rn
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Sir Andrew...laughing, hands you another cup of coffee, wake up there boy!!

Martie and Tara, you both snuck in on me here....thank you both. Tara, that's true and in that case you are fortunate
Martie..sometimes we can wait too long to say words and never get the chance again.
This is not written by life experience, just something I played around with on break at work last night. Trying my hand at a few acrostics and this is what I was delt

[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 10-21-1999).]
Munda
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Hoot, I catched the feeling of regret immediately, reading your poem, so you expressed yourself very well once more and I enjoyed reading it, although I have no idea what an acrostic is. : ) Maybe you don't mind explaining that to me some day ? : )

Munda

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Munda an acrostic forms a word or words by reading the first letter of each line down...in this case it reads I LOVE YOU.....hence, I Love You Said Too Late
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9 posted 10-21-1999 05:42 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

This is so SAD! Poignant, wistful, beautiful. Thank you for sharing this ...

Nocht

PS: You pulled off this acrostic very well; I never noticed it was an acrostic till I read your explanation ... those are the best kind, that don't seem forced and obvious!

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"Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus"
(Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.")

hoot_owl_rn
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Nocht...thank you for the wonderful compliment
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I loved this Hoot! Great acrostic, too!

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It is a good topic for a poem, hoot. Do we say them? Can we say them? Will we say them in time? What will happen if we say them? What will happen if we don't? So many questions to be pondered.......
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13 posted 10-22-1999 08:24 AM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Hoot: *sigh*.. Precious words indeed..

HUGS

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Very sad and very well done........

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
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Excellent verse and Message Dear Lady.

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
hoot_owl_rn
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Thank you everyone for your response to this one, I appreciate it
Systematic Decay
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I really loved this one. I didn't catch the acrostic either, but looking back at it I wonder, how could I miss it?? It is the thing that pulls the entire poem together. This one put a wistful little smile on my face. sigh

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-
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Well, Hoot, another well-done job, and thanks for giving me something to write about. (Been in a poetic funk these past few days...)
Dark Angel
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Hoot, this is a wonderful poem, sometime we do not say the things we want to, when we know we should be and we let that moment slip by. Loved the Acrostic, I LOVE YOU terrific!!

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


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Systematic, Sunshine and Dark angel, hey, thanks I'm glad you enjoyed it
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Wonderful poem ...it is better to remain silent then say something which is not really felt ... thank you
JennyLee
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Great acrostic hoot,I enjoyed the loneliness that this piece portrays.
Well done.

Jenny
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Thank you all
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well hoot gonna sneak in right after your thank you all *g* but yes this is wonderful, and Nocht is right, you don't notice the acrostic at first, just the substanc of the poem, and yes, that is the best kind of acrostic, beautiful poem
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