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JOY, I hate to be the bearer of bad news...BUT,
I don't understand the rhyme scheme....
First stanza, ABCB..ok. But "long" was used twice in this stanza...kinda repetitive
Second stanza, No apparent rhyme, except that the last words of both stanzas rhyme
Third Stanza, dawn and drawn rhyme, was that meant? If so...the meter is completely off.
Fourth Stanza...seems it was meant to be ABCB again, but what would be the first line is broken into two.
It just seemed like it was thrown together without regard for rhyme and meter. If you want to write a pome like that, fine, but do it ALL in free verse.
Sorry if I sound rude....just my point of view.
"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."