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In Dreams You No Longer Hide (For the one I truly love)

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Andrew Scott
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0 posted 10-19-1999 11:10 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Andrew Scott

Under midnight sun
With stars burning bright
You walked from my dream

My pulse set to run
By your touch so light
A fast flowing stream

Softly whispered words
Words more felt than heard
Breathing warmth across my skin

Your intent conferred
My body stirred
Filled with lust's adrenaline

You lie submissive
Your petals in fan
A flush of beautiful flowers

Take all I can give
Give all that you can
Sharing only what can be ours

With passion spent
In blissful union
I gather you to my side

Feeling content
My love's companion
In dreams you no longer hide


[This message has been edited by Andrew Scott (edited 10-19-1999).]
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1 posted 10-19-1999 11:23 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

This is great, ANdrew. I really admire those who take on the difficult rhyme schemes and create good poetry. ABC-ABC,DEF-DEF,etc is not as easy as you make it look. Well done.
Denise
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2 posted 10-19-1999 11:26 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very very nice!

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Denise
Martie
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3 posted 10-19-1999 11:35 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

I don't understand much about rhyme
but this was really and truly sublime!
Andrew Scott
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4 posted 10-20-1999 12:20 AM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Sir Balladeer: I guess those lessons I took from you in Poetry 101 are starting to pay off. Thanks for the kudoes. But you're still a taskmaster

Lady D: Glad you enjoyed and thanks for the smile. Right back at ya!

Martie: I took a lesson or two from the Master Bard up above, but other than that I just try to write what sounds right. I may not always make it, but I think I'm batting better than 500. Thanks for the response.
A Romantic Heart
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Forever In Your Heart


5 posted 10-20-1999 12:44 AM       View Profile for A Romantic Heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for A Romantic Heart

What a wonderful flowing of words! passionate!
RainbowGirl
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6 posted 10-20-1999 07:22 AM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Andrew: Sounded great to my ears..

HUGS

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.

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7 posted 10-20-1999 09:52 AM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Truly Beautiful!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
Pepper
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8 posted 10-20-1999 10:51 AM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Love this one Andrew!

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
hoot_owl_rn
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9 posted 10-20-1999 11:58 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Sir Andrew, what a fine job...do take a bow for this one. I love the format you used, the rhyme scheme interesting and it really accented the brilliance of this piece. Well done!!
Skyfyre
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10 posted 10-20-1999 06:31 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

"...Your petals in a fan
A flush of beautiful flowers..."

Exquisite!

Nocht


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"Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus"
(Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.")

Andrew Scott
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11 posted 10-21-1999 11:24 AM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

To One And All: Thanks for the comments... I enjoy them as much as I do the writing. You all make me blush. :O

[This message has been edited by Andrew Scott (edited 10-21-1999).]

[This message has been edited by Andrew Scott (edited 10-21-1999).]
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12 posted 10-21-1999 02:59 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Aaahh....Andrew, this is beautiful to say the least! I echo all the above comments, but especially Nochtdraco....that was my favorite line(s) too !! I too found the rhyme scheme exquisite and yes, quite challenging! You've made it look so easy! I also like that little face you made above - - **blushing ? Looks more like you're catching flies! LOL hehe

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I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale

Andrew Scott
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13 posted 10-21-1999 07:25 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

PFF: I'm sure I've had my fair share in insect intake over the years... thanks for reading and leaving your mark... those were some of my favorite lines as well.
Alwye
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14 posted 10-21-1999 08:54 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Truly beautiful...so exquisite..

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*Krista Knutson*

I walk with the multitude, yet alone am I in their midst. -- Daniel L. Miller

 
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