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the carwash

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mia
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0 posted 10-19-1999 08:37 PM       View Profile for mia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for mia

I sat in your car
as you pumped gas
into my veins
was I expecting more
from this one night
of not doing anything...
this one night
of me and you
silence has crept between us
I spend my days wondering
if you still love me
as before
but I recieve
nothings
because there is no time
in the day
for you and me
and the night
brings us together
too tired to love
like we should
but we endure
positive that there will be
a time when we will live
and consume our love
that the fairytail will come
and forever will be ours
because as you pumped gas
I sat in your car
and closed my eyes
to see us kissing under the water
in that carwash
© Copyright 1999 mia - All Rights Reserved
Echo Rhayne
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since 09-17-99
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1 posted 10-19-1999 09:45 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Awwwwwwwe, I like this...Though now I am singing the carwash song LoL.


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Systematic Decay
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2 posted 10-19-1999 10:40 PM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Systematic Decay

This is really sweet.

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3 posted 10-19-1999 10:44 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Very nice, Mia. Enjoyable reading.
 
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