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Goodbye Alice

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Watcher666
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0 posted 10-19-1999 04:02 AM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Darling, it's time to say goodbye
As I promised I won't cry
I'll be strong for the kids

You wanted to be the first to go
And now I'm glad you did
I wouldn't want you to ever know this pain

You were my lover and my best friend
My life I've spent with you
I'll remember just like I said

Remember all the times we shared
The good and the bad
But mostly I'll remember you

Laughing and happy
How you used to butcher the english Language
And how I would tease you about it so

I'll think of the times when we were poor
Just starting out our lives
And the trouble we got into as kids

Your sky blue eyes and killer smile
The way you fought for your family
They way that you loved me

Holding you close night and day
Letting you think I was helpless
Having you get your way

I know you're in God's hands now
Hey when you see your brother?
Don't believe what he tells you about me

Well sweetheart it's time
I'll kiss you cheek once more
This is the hardest thing I've even done
I'll let them close the coffin lid




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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
© Copyright 1999 Watcher666 - All Rights Reserved
suthern
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1 posted 10-19-1999 07:07 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Heartbreaking... but very well done... I like the bit of humor in the next to the last verse.
Kitty**
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2 posted 10-19-1999 08:43 AM       View Profile for Kitty**   Email Kitty**   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Kitty**'s Home Page   View IP for Kitty**

I don't like reading this type of poem..but read them I do..
Tears make the laughter that much sweeter!
Good writing..Watcher
hoot_owl_rn
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3 posted 10-19-1999 09:06 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Oh my, I am sitting here fighting back tears with this piece. You have done a wonderful job. The flow is good, the feelings and emotions this stirs unbelievable. At first I thought maybe she was leaving him, when I got to the end it nearly broke my heart. Excellent poem, thanks for sharing. If this grief is but your own, my thoughts and prayers are with you.
Iloveit
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4 posted 10-19-1999 09:50 AM       View Profile for Iloveit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Iloveit

really excellent, gave me tears and the chills, sorry for your pain and loss, but thank you for sharing
JennyLee
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5 posted 10-19-1999 10:27 AM       View Profile for JennyLee   Email JennyLee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JennyLee

Heartbreakingly beautiful Watcher!

Jenny
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6 posted 10-19-1999 10:51 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

When one makes me misty eyed, you know it has power!
Smashing peeping tom!
Watcher666
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7 posted 10-19-1999 03:46 PM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Thank-You all for reading.This was actually for my Father.He's just learning to let go of his best friend,sister,wife and lover of 54 years.Thank-you for your thoughts and prayers.

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
Systematic Decay
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8 posted 10-19-1999 04:20 PM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Systematic Decay

It is a very touching piece, and even brought a lump to my throat at the thought of losing my love. Thanks for sharing.

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-
Dark Angel
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9 posted 10-19-1999 07:02 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Watcher, this is a wonderful poem, I too thought he was leaving her,until I got to the end, my heart skipped a beat, this was very touching, my prayers and thoughts are with you.

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


EnglishRose
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10 posted 10-19-1999 07:14 PM       View Profile for EnglishRose   Email EnglishRose   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for EnglishRose

great job, how very true,,

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Balladeer
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11 posted 10-19-1999 08:21 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

You wove this one very well, Watcher
Denise
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12 posted 10-19-1999 09:04 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

....well, now that i've used up all the kleenex in the house and have finally calmed down here...a bit...Fabulous writing.

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Denise
DreamEvil
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13 posted 10-20-1999 01:11 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Echoes the above, in full.

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Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvilŠ

H. Arlequin
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14 posted 11-03-1999 02:54 AM       View Profile for H. Arlequin   Email H. Arlequin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit H. Arlequin's Home Page   View IP for H. Arlequin

HA applauds Watcher!!
Jennifer Marie O'Neil
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15 posted 11-03-1999 03:32 AM       View Profile for Jennifer Marie O'Neil   Email Jennifer Marie O'Neil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jennifer Marie O'Neil

Really sweet poem.
RainbowGirl
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16 posted 11-03-1999 08:28 AM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Watcher: Beautifully written..

HUGS

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.

Nan
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17 posted 11-03-1999 08:31 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Putting these feelings into words is no small chore - Nicely done, Watcher
Pepper
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18 posted 11-03-1999 09:31 AM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Beautifully written Watcher......

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A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extrordinaire!
Martie
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19 posted 11-03-1999 10:56 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Your heart was in this poem Watcher. Well done!
devina
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20 posted 11-03-1999 11:44 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

this was such a sweet poem, i can feel your heart in every line, both you and your father will be in my prayers.
Isis
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21 posted 11-03-1999 06:38 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Aye it is beautifully written Watcher :0
Bought a tear or two to my blue eyes too
Thanks

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Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)

Andrew Scott
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22 posted 11-03-1999 06:56 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Well Done Watcher... done with sensitivity and grace. I wish your father well.
Seymour Tabin
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23 posted 11-04-1999 06:04 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Watcher,
You did well, enjoyed the read.
Lorelei54
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24 posted 11-04-1999 08:15 PM       View Profile for Lorelei54   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lorelei54

Something I too think about from time to time
I know I am growing older and so is the man I love...
It's going to be so hard to let him go...whether it be me or him going first...
But I pray we will have had enough days!!!
To make memories to last the rest of our days..

Beautiful!!! sad, but real amd what else is life, but many experiences?
 
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