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Elder Speak [Dedicated to YOU, the Poet]

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Sunshine
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Elder Speak

A little time disconnects us, oh my Elder dear,
I duly share with you now all my hopes and fears
for you have reached an age and solemn wisdom wise
may you now answer my repeated “how’s” and “why’s.”

Though you may not speak, nor nod your graying head
I’ll garner your gifted wisdom before I seek my bed,
that you have in your experience, and know there be par none,
for I shall not rebuild proved wheels, less they be undone.

In your hands I lay my fears of life that lies ahead,
to you I bare my heart, my soul’s torn tears now shed,
through your stories I listen, learn, map my own road home,
from you I value great your thoughts deep within your dome.

Your words are truly gifts, none finer I’ve ever sought
for declarations made by you can only thus be taught;
oh Elder one, wise and aged, take me in your care,
reveal to me your treasures fine, treasures that are rare.

Now the wind is at my back, time leads the sun to dusk
withered hands shaped your words, body brittle, emptied husk,
your former life gives shape to mine, a treasure trove is bound;
Pray you sire, be it known in your love of life, my soul’s re-found.

And promise now, in deep October winds, as you lay your head,
revelations from deep within will stand within your stead.
As young ones come to me, your wisdom will common bond
as aged be I, thus share with them, truth Elder once leaned on.

18 October, 1999
©KRJ



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Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow

© Copyright 1999 Karilea Rilling - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 10-18-1999 02:23 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

One of your best Sunshine...Brava, my friend!

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"Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats

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Oh my Sunshine! Such wonderful work, my friend!!

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
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Wonderful work Sunshine
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Thank you Caroline, Pepper and Hoot. I love it best when the thoughts for pieces are "just there...", don't you?
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5 posted 10-18-1999 05:47 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

The best I've seen from you, Sunshine. A work to be proud of.
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6 posted 10-18-1999 07:09 PM       View Profile for U K Hero   Email U K Hero   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for U K Hero

A professional piece by far.
Marilyn
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Bravo Sunshine. Great work.
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8 posted 10-18-1999 08:40 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

To my Elders and my Youngers, I salute YOU all! Thanks for reading and commenting. I'm enjoying this one myself.
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9 posted 10-18-1999 10:25 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre



This liked me. Really it did!!

Nocht

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"Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus"
(Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.")

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Wonderful, Sunshine!

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Denise
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11 posted 10-19-1999 12:44 AM       View Profile for Serraley   Email Serraley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Serraley

I loved it... beautiful and lyrical and very thought-provoking.
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Nocht, denise, thank you very much for reading.

Serraley, welcome, new member, and thank you for reading this and posting a response. I'm very happy that you found beauty in this piece.
Michael
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13 posted 11-08-1999 04:16 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Don't know how I missed this one before, Sunshine.
This is wonderful.


Michael
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I second Michael..(and the others), very good work gal.....After I die and I'm reincarnated, I'm gonna be able to write like this! (Then again, I may come back as a bug or something, and yanno that would give Balladeer something to be really happy about).
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Michael, having you drag this from the archives really lifted my spirits,

and Toe, I know your words are more profound than some folks think,

so thank you both for reading, and commenting.
Mike
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16 posted 11-08-1999 06:51 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Wooooo Hoooooo Sunshine..
doing Kansas proud... great job!!!
Munda
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17 posted 11-08-1999 07:00 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

Wow Sunshine, this is.....absolutely wonderful ! : )
Sally S.
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18 posted 11-08-1999 10:33 PM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

Well, I really AM lacking now! Almost let this one slip through my fingers!
As stated above...this is a wonderful piece. Nice work!!!
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19 posted 11-08-1999 10:36 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

I'm so glad that you found this to be a whoohoo, Mike, and see, look, a Wow from Munda!, and a full catch by Sally! Thank you for coming by!
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Truely beautiful SunShine, and oh-so-true.
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21 posted 11-09-1999 08:58 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Thank you, Lynn.
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what would we do without you?
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