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Open Poetry #3

The fading seasons

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 1999-10-18 12:36 PM

A stream of light attracts me closer
Against the current, to the pane
Where in the abyss of a poster
The autumn bleeds in drops of rain
The rain plays drums upon my window
In wild passion, stormy moans
The raging wind sets sounds into
Aligned rows of nature’s notes
By which the weather plays in ardor
To which the branches gently sway
The hand of time strikes harder, harder
As seasons softly fade away

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I fell in love and kept on falling

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

1 posted 1999-10-18 12:39 PM

I can feel the weather in this one! I like the way you used 'softly' in the last line, it really stands out against the raging imagery throughout.

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

2 posted 1999-10-18 12:47 PM

Beautiful Master, very nicely written. I love the imagery and symbolism in this piece

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

3 posted 1999-10-18 01:01 AM

Thanks Severn and Hoot! I wrote this in about ten minutes, but I really think it came out good. Glad you liked it!

Denise

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

4 posted 1999-10-18 08:55 PM

Very good, Master. I liked the feel of this one!

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Denise

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

5 posted 1999-10-18 10:15 PM

Thanks Denise!

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