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One in Six..... from my darker side and best to be read very slowly

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Andrew Scott
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0 posted 10-17-1999 08:10 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Andrew Scott

Click!
Pulling pressure

Click!
Empty chamber

Click!
Spinning cylinder

Click!
Hidden danger

Click!
You're a winner

BANG!
And the loser
© Copyright 1999 Andrew Scott - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 10-17-1999 08:20 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Whew...Russian Roulette....very well written, but very morbid.
Andrew Scott
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2 posted 10-17-1999 08:52 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

As I said... "from my darker side." My thoughts don't normally run in this vain... all I can say about it was that I was visiting my favored fast food hell for lunch and just thought of the word "click." Then I thought "What can I do with 'click?'" Well, here ya go. Given that bit of history, I suppose you could look at it like eating one to many hamburgers and being hit with the cholesteral bullet. The result is the same.
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3 posted 10-17-1999 09:35 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Well, to come up with something for 'click' I think you did very well. I would, however, have named it "Chamber Music". hehe
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4 posted 10-17-1999 09:51 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Whow, Andrew! This was a shocker! Dark side, indeed! I did something similar once, not the same topic though. I didn't even have the courage to print it out for myself to keep. You've more courage than I! Clever selection of words!

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Denise
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I am speachless. Definately darker my friend.
Andrew Scott
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6 posted 10-18-1999 09:29 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Sir Balladeer: A fine choice of titles. Perhaps I'll change it to such... I was also thinking about "16 and two-thirds percent"... You do the math!

Lady D: I treated this more as an excercise than anything else, so it took no great courage to write or post. I suppose if I had some personal connection with such an act it would be a different story. I really do kind of relate it to the hamburger given that heart attacks run in my family and they will most likely be the death of me. So there ya go... thanks for reading... always a pleasure to see you mark.

Lady Marilyn: Its nice to know my writing can have such an effect. My many thanks for your time and response.
Sally S.
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7 posted 10-18-1999 10:14 PM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

Yikes!!!! Ewwwww.... Hey, this was even spooky! You were right, dark indeed.
Skyfyre
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8 posted 10-18-1999 10:31 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Hey, if you'd just put the round in the first chamber, you could have made it a haiku!!


"Click, you were lucky --
Spin, pressure on the trigger --
Bang! No more worries."

(Hey, now that's profound)

Just kidding of course ... this was raw and shocking, I love it!

Nocht

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"Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus"
(Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.")

Andrew Scott
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9 posted 10-18-1999 10:56 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Hey Nochtdraco... great haiku! Kind of like using a automatic... you don't ever want to be the first in line.
Systematic Decay
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10 posted 10-18-1999 11:22 PM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Systematic Decay

LOL....being half polish, I'd be more likely to play Polish roulette....all the chambers are loaded. Just like the polish firing squad...where their in a circle and the victim is in the middle..

Seriously though...I thought it was very chilling. Good work.

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-
 
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