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Martie
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0 posted 1999-10-17 06:59 PM



The sun patterns the wall
to lace
and weaves crystal
into the morning
we lie heaped under
blankets
listening to the lazy minutes
marveling each other

© Copyright 1999 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 1999-10-17 08:06 PM


Sounds like the perfect Sunday, or any day to me! You painted a wonderful picture with so few words! Love it!

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Denise

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2 posted 1999-10-17 08:23 PM


Wow, so few words, but so much said. I loved the feel to this one, one of those lazy afternoons when nothing needs to be done and you spend the day just enjoying each other. Great Poem!!

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This is courage...to bear unflinchingly what heaven sends. ~Eurpides

mia
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3 posted 1999-10-17 08:56 PM


I loved this one...you caught the moment so wonderfully... I could'nt have expressed it any other way... loved it!

mia

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