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Made it to survive

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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 10-17-1999 04:26 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Made it to survive

She knelt besides the waters edge
Looking deep inside.
Watching coral gardens grow and
Swimming butterflies.
Sketched her with my fountain pen so
Quiet her abide.
Set it down in black and white and
Made it to survive.
Stole it from the God of time for
Future idolize.
Something more then whimsy dream to
Stay before my eyes.
Now I hold the black and white with
Tears that never dry.
Alone by the waters edge of
Swimming butterflies.
© Copyright 1999 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 10-17-1999 04:47 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Oh, my, Seymour, now you've gone and done it! My eyes can't see the screen for all my tears! This is absolutely beautiful! *snif* *wipe* This is one of them 'keepers' for the heart!

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Denise
Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration


2 posted 10-17-1999 05:36 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Sey- This is beautiful! What an interesting and captivating use of imagery!
Skyfyre
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3 posted 10-17-1999 06:34 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Simply delightful. Thank you for this gift.

Nocht

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"Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus"
(Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.")

caroline
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4 posted 10-17-1999 07:02 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

May I offer my humble opinion that this is the best of your great works that I have read? It is classical in its beauty, Seymour...one of those truly timeless poems that will live forever.

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"Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats

hoot_owl_rn
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5 posted 10-17-1999 08:51 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Seymore, all your works are great, but of them I think this is probably the best...no, I know it is the best. You have created a fine work of art with your words here. Beautiful, there are no other words for it
mia
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6 posted 10-17-1999 08:59 PM       View Profile for mia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mia

This was the first poem that I read of yours...because I haven't been here often lately...but it was beautiful... and I will defenitely be looking for more of your work... Keep it up...
luv
mia
Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 10-17-1999 09:51 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Denise,
Sorry to mess up your mascara, It felt good when I wrote it. See you and all the good folk in three days, going on a cruise.
Chris,
You are one of my favorite readers thank you for the great comments
Noch,
You are welcome. Thank you.
Caroline,
Your words humble me, thank you.
Hoot and Mia,
Be back from the cruise wensday thank you for now see you all in three days. *L*
Denise
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8 posted 10-17-1999 09:55 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Have a great trip, Seymour! Again, excellent poem! Don't worry about the mascara. Having a poem evoke such emotion is worth the streaks!

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Denise
 
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