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Eleven P.M. Mist

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Sunshine
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Eleven P.M. Mist

Standing on the street corner
bathed in artificial sunlight
from the all-night street lamp;

smelling the gutter smell of old leaves
and two dead rats;

listening to the hungry howl of an
alley-Tom (remembering my own Tom once
called Mr.), and even the alley-Mr.,
though hunger stricken,
passes by the rancid rats.

Mist comes in, cooling my face
after the warm April afternoon;

but now a chill sets in, in the eleven p.m. mist,
the cold and chilling eleven p.m. mist.

Wish to go home, do I.

But then beggars would ride horses
with silk manes.

Eleven p.m. mist blankets my body,
my body,
not thin,
not fat,
not in-between;

and if I sleep tonight, only my spirit
will stay to be cooled by
the eleven p.m. mist.

Circa April, 1970
İKRJ
17 October 1999


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Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow

© Copyright 1999 Karilea Rilling - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 10-17-1999 10:34 AM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Wonderful imagery Sunshine! I could smell the old leaves and dead rats. Amazing writing, my friend.Loved this one, I do!

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
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2 posted 10-17-1999 12:10 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Wow! You take me there with you, Sunshine!
Fantastic imagery here.

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"Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats

Martie
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The imagery in this was wonderful and so real it made me fear for your safety.
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4 posted 10-17-1999 12:47 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Sunshine, you get better and better. This is terrific.
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5 posted 10-17-1999 01:26 PM       View Profile for U K Hero   Email U K Hero   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for U K Hero

Worthy of praise excellent imagination.

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My mind was filled with all the images that you so eloquently portrayed! Well done!

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Denise
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7 posted 10-18-1999 08:58 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

WOW. I'm humbled by all of the praise.... everyone's! Thank you all for reading.
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