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Drug Trip

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Alicat
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0 posted 10-16-1999 11:46 PM       View Profile for Alicat   Email Alicat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Alicat


I The stormy sea
c of mankind does
a drown in its own
n vomitous wretch
s
e
e
A
pony The mother screams
Metal to metal as bolts ac at child unhearing
clashing arms of ross the plain echoing her own
fire shake the as tongues of fire motherís words.
molten earth. shred the sky, rending The innocence
Armored saints sinew, bone, and flesh in of children
salute bloody conglomerate heaps of oftimes angers
swords, dipped steamy carnage through patient adults
in phosphorus clouds of translucent engaged in
laden gore. Souls lights, shining meekly. petty squabbles
are banished from Murderous over forgotten
mortal lands proud peals split youth. Jealous
of their chivalrous pious glass are the mature
deeds. Mountains in holy altars of the mind
peer out into the to righteous of a young child.
sea, giving light men of old The man walks
to games of death. seeing, making screaming out,
All are pawns in games of kings, erasing expendible expinditures. All hail the king.
Amen say the soothsaying seers to comfort anger and cushion their necks. Secret
daggers plot evil plots hatched from secret minds. Through the eyes of dragons see
the murky pitch of wretched hearts. Mangled children scream in pain as the king
passes on stallion white. Trodding none too softly on pigeon toes, he laughs and
gives them pennies. Yet far away the young boys learn their games of war, thinking
it but a game. A few years more and they will learn of blood and pain, to give and
to receive. Horses scream and men cry out in defense of the olden edifice. Oily
scum streams from heated cauldron dumped on children freed. Pure breeds gallop
with bloodied hooves as gallant men wipe gore encrusted swords. The battle is over,
the victory won. But where is the pony, with child afoot, singing innocent songs
of youth? Look yonder in pasture, scorched grass abounds through hollow and fen,
through marsh and wood deep and thick. But search for youth in tulgy forest and
you may find it, if you dare. They run in field and plain, in wheat browned by sunlit
sky. Through them on mountains, they scream their threats and promises. Hills and
vales offer their voices to create panic stricken cities and towns of bourgeois comfort,
docily living in mayo houses and huts below a lonely castle. Thus sayeth the Lord.
Amen, Amen.


Alicat the slightly medicated

[This message has been edited by Alicat (edited 10-16-1999).]

[This message has been edited by Nan (edited 10-17-1999).]
© Copyright 1999 Alastair Adamson - All Rights Reserved
Nicole
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1 posted 10-17-1999 12:10 AM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

Ali, sug...this is amazing. You've combined a most spectacular artistic approach with very good poetry. More often than not, I see one or the other..but not both, as you have skillfully displayed here.

[This message has been edited by Satiate (edited 10-17-1999).]
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2 posted 10-17-1999 12:15 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

What a labor of love this was! Love your castle! I admire anyone who dedicates this much effort to their work. Nice, Alicat!
hoot_owl_rn
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3 posted 10-17-1999 12:22 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Unbelieveable!!! What work this took
Nan
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4 posted 10-17-1999 12:22 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Good work, Alicat - I absolutely love this - you've created a visual and mental masterpiece all in one...
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5 posted 10-17-1999 12:27 AM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Tremendous, Alicat!!

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"Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats

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6 posted 10-17-1999 12:32 AM       View Profile for Ladycat   Email Ladycat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ladycat's Home Page   View IP for Ladycat

What can I say Mr.Adamson? You truely have outdone yourself this time. This is the first time that I get to post a reply and look what I get to see. Drug Trip? How did you manage to get a name like that for this piece though? This is more than poetry, this is a work of art. I have seen some created pieces, but I think that this one takes the cake..
Darquewing and I are awestuck!!! I have to save this piece for later..
I am in love with this piece.. What gave you such a brilliant idea? I have to know..

WOW..
The Very Shocked Kitty
Ladycat

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Alicat
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7 posted 10-17-1999 12:58 AM       View Profile for Alicat   Email Alicat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alicat

Guys, all of you are too wonderful for the mere words which come to mind.

Ok, time for background and inspiration. This all happened after trying unsuccessfully for a year to create original type-art. I was sitting on the roof of a hostel in Budapest, Hungary, looking over the skyline as the sun was setting back in July of 1990. I was there as part of a missionary team teaching English as a second language using the New Testament as a textbook while I was still in college. The scenes played out in my head, the castle took shape, and in one sitting, this one was born. Sad to say, but the title came from reading it anew after 9 years of being buried in a notebook...it was untitled, and that was the first thing to come to mind.

Alicat the slightly medicated
Pepper
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8 posted 10-17-1999 10:21 AM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

WOW! I have never seen anything like this Alicat! Remarkable, to say the least.
I love this piece and have saved it in a special file.
Bravo........

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
Systematic Decay
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9 posted 10-17-1999 10:30 AM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Systematic Decay

Alicat....That was amazing...I mean lets forget about the picture for a moment and focus on the words....they were elegant yet cruel, beautiful and truthful...quite a hard combination to come by...and then to put it in the form you did....I would need to be slightly medicated to get rid of the pounding headache if I ever attempted that! Great work!


Sorry...I was bored...

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-
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10 posted 10-17-1999 02:05 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

WOW! What talent you possess! This is most excellent!

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Denise
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11 posted 10-17-1999 06:56 PM       View Profile for Alicat   Email Alicat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alicat

*Deep burgundy blushes*

Thank you. Everyone, thank you. Last night when I put this one up, I was pretty darn apprehensive about its reception. Since then, I've been grinning ear-to-ear.

Wow...

Alicat the slighty stunned jongleur aspirante
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12 posted 10-19-1999 07:18 PM       View Profile for Ladycat   Email Ladycat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ladycat's Home Page   View IP for Ladycat

Wow!!! Now you see.. You never thought that soooooo many people would think that this piece was this great and see what you get.. I'm impressed.. Great work and a wonderfully thought out idea..

Love,
Lady

"Sometimes at night the wolves are silent and only the moon howls."
Marilyn
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13 posted 10-19-1999 07:32 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Wow Alicat.....Words can not even touch the awe I feel. The poem is wonderful and the art is amazing! you should never have been worried about posting it......You are so very talented.
wayoutwalt
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14 posted 10-26-1999 12:59 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

deep freakin wow to you alicat had to peak and see how you did it i have always been proud to know such a talented twerp as yuh muh friend
Christopher
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15 posted 10-26-1999 02:55 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

For one who claims to no poetic prowess, Ali, you sure do rock when you come on the scene! Agreed that it is a work of art, visually, written and aurally!
Awesome doesn't even scratch the surface!
Watcher666
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16 posted 10-26-1999 03:55 AM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Absolutely Fabulous!!!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
Munda
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17 posted 03-05-2000 10:26 AM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

nr 24 ! Two drug trips in one forum ? HI  
Sunshine
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18 posted 06-19-2007 02:50 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Man, am I glad for links.  Where was I when you worked this up, Ali?  Must have been somewhere else, that's for sure.

awesome!

 
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