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Systematic Decay
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That place with padded walls a


0 posted 10-16-1999 11:03 PM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Systematic Decay

A mere ant in the nest
A small fish in the sea
Nobody notices
Insignifigant me

Just one deer in the woods
A squirrel in the park
Nobdy cares
When I'm left in the dark

Just a grain of sand
A dim star in the sky
I'm always alone
And wondering why

To a silent wall
Everything I've said
I wonder if they'd notice
If I suddenly dropped dead

I'm lost in a glare
Brighter than the sun
I wish with all my might
That at least your having fun

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-
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Denise
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1 posted 10-16-1999 11:07 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

I have felt like this at times in my life. I have found that the best way to deal with it is to lose myself in thoughts of others! Pretty soon, I'm not even thinking of my problems anymore! Great poem, by the way!

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Denise
Alicat
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since 05-23-99
Posts 4277
Coastal Texas


2 posted 10-16-1999 11:12 PM       View Profile for Alicat   Email Alicat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alicat

The speaker feels insignificant, and by so regaling us with the life the speaker feels so acutely, a potent work is created. Bravo!

Also, this sparks a fragmented memory of a song once heard in my disjointed childhood:

Nobody likes me, everybody hates me
Going to the garden to eat some worms

Alicat
hoot_owl_rn
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since 07-05-99
Posts 11105
Glen Hope, PA USA


3 posted 10-17-1999 12:29 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

so sad, but so well put

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This is courage...to bear unflinchingly what heaven sends. ~Eurpides
Alwye
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In the space between moments


4 posted 10-17-1999 12:36 AM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

I too have felt like this quite a few times in my life...It's a rough thing to go through...sad, yet wonderfully done.

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*Krista Knutson*

I walk with the multitude, yet alone am I in their midst. -- Daniel L. Miller

Star Fairy 2
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since 09-06-99
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cerritos, california, usa


5 posted 10-17-1999 01:32 AM       View Profile for Star Fairy 2   Email Star Fairy 2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Star Fairy 2

oooh this hits a sore mark ... insignifigance... my worst fear so far... i hope to live thru this one..

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Don't Fall.. Rise in Love
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Systematic Decay
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Posts 1312
That place with padded walls a


6 posted 10-17-1999 02:23 AM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Systematic Decay

This is my problem, because I have so much to say, but no one listens. I have views that could cause a lot of controversy, and alot of animosity towards me, or a lot of agreement with me, depending on who I'm talking to, but nobody ever cares what I ahve to say, with the exception of the wonderful poets here at passsions.

BTW: Anyone interested in improving teen #2, please visit it and reply to my post in there. More of a rant really, but hopefully people will listen.

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-
DreamEvil
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since 06-22-99
Posts 2442


7 posted 10-17-1999 09:23 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Sys, we both know that isn't entirely true as I listen with interest to all you have to say and do not find your views controversial but refreshing rather. Regardless, we are here to listen to you my friend.

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Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvilŠ

JennyLee
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since 09-01-99
Posts 1478
Northwestern, NJ.


8 posted 10-17-1999 12:05 PM       View Profile for JennyLee   Email JennyLee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JennyLee

Dear SYS, I care for every single word you write and your views. Keep up the honesty!!

Jenny
suicidal dreams
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since 09-28-1999
Posts 345
Toledo Ohio USA


9 posted 10-17-1999 01:22 PM       View Profile for suicidal dreams   Email suicidal dreams   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suicidal dreams

I listen to every word you say and watch everything you do, and let me tell you somethin more people listen to you than you let yourself believe

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life is short kill quick
Dark Angel
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since 08-04-99
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10 posted 10-18-1999 01:37 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Sys, this is very sad, but well put, well done

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


 
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