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Ergo Est

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Alicat
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0 posted 10-16-1999 04:26 PM       View Profile for Alicat   Email Alicat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Alicat

Frustration of this fatuation
Stems from the miles that lie between us
Leaving me disconsolate in its wake

There's a risk I'll gladly take
Situation to change my location
Waning days have got me in a rush

Love will lose a ton of dust
Given you have my heart a shake
Termination of our hermitation

Consolidation of our habitation
Clad in white I see you blush
Nuptial vows we'll someday take

10-13-99

Alicat the twitterpated satiated kilted kitty
© Copyright 1999 Alastair Adamson - All Rights Reserved
Nicole
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1 posted 10-16-1999 04:52 PM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

We are...

I loved hearing you read this, and I loved reading it myself.

Welcome back to the forums, sug.

[This message has been edited by Satiate (edited 10-16-1999).]
Denise
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2 posted 10-16-1999 07:24 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Beautiful!

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Denise
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3 posted 10-16-1999 08:32 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

How beautiful ... I couldn't help but smile as I read this ... thank you for sharing it.

Nocht

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"Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus"
(Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.")

Nan
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4 posted 10-16-1999 08:47 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Geesh - you've written a great poem, and here I sit analyzing the rhyme scheme - I really like this one - It's kinda like a petite sestina, don't ya think?
a-b-c
c-a-b
b-c-a
a-b-c
Awesome!!!
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5 posted 10-16-1999 09:59 PM       View Profile for Alicat   Email Alicat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alicat

satiate: therefore, we are

dsnyder: thanks

nocht: thanks again...i was smiling like a loon when writing this at work

nan: hehehe...tickled pink you critiqued this one, but you missed something...the 'a' line contains two 'a's aabc caab bcaa aabc in trochaic tetrameter, positioned in tercets gotcha


Alicat the persnikitty
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6 posted 10-16-1999 10:35 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

This one makes me smile...congrats you two!!

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This is courage...to bear unflinchingly what heaven sends. ~Eurpides
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