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A villanelle about my woeful existence under the thumbs of the evil ones (my first)

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LngJhnAg
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0 posted 10-15-1999 04:54 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for LngJhnAg

I'm caught twixt Toe and Balladeer,
I'm confused about where I'm at.
Maybe I shouldn't have come in here?

I'm constantly vilified by that old Toerag,
(His boot's permanently fixed in my rear).
And Suthern follows up to help him brag.

Balladeer writes more subtlely clear,
(I suspect he's a lover of cats).
And, hence I've found I must live in fear.

Iloveit shamelessly tips her hat,
For the mean things I so often hear,
From that ne'er do well scalawag.

Look at my life, so helplessly drear,
Each day seems to slothfully drag,
Because I'm the target of Toe and ‘Deer.

They take their shots, I'm often bagged,
They revel in this sport, they appear
To have more fun as my spirit's dragged
Through the mud that's my life in here.


ta daaaa - and I really don't feel this way - I just needed something to write about. I love 'em both.
© Copyright 1999 Michael Waterman - All Rights Reserved
suthern
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1 posted 10-15-1999 05:00 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

And they love you! LOL. And we all enjoy your poetic potshots... I mean... love fest! LOL (And by the way... I follow Toerag because I think heaven can't possibly be a finer sight for these eyes to feast upon... he usually "gets" you so good he doesn't need any help bragging! LOL)
LngJhnAg
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2 posted 10-15-1999 05:06 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Belle

And that's why I can never send you my peekshure. You'd dump that old broken down college professor so fast he'd think he had leprosy (sorry Toe, I knbow I promised not to tell Belle about your localized case of decaying flesh. Yanno, though, it WAS your idea to do a panty raid at the Leper Colony).
Skyfyre
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3 posted 10-15-1999 05:10 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Hilarious ... with a title like that, how could I not read it?

Let's hear it for the "evil ones" and their diabolical crusade!!

Nocht

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"Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus"
(Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.")

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4 posted 10-15-1999 05:14 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Ummmm... Sailor, I hate to point out that your memory is as useless as the rest of you... but you HAVE sent me a peekshure or two of you... and I still prefer that gorgeous professor Toerag! *G* Which... considering lil Lor's preferences, is probably good for my continued health! LOL
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5 posted 10-15-1999 05:40 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Awww, LongJohn. We never rag on anyone we don't care about so you can see we must love you to death!!!!! It would be a poorer place without you, for sure, but, if you insist on leavin', can Lorelei stay?

Well, I've got pictures of both of you and you're fine specimens indeed. Ain't got one of Suthern 'cause she won't give me one and ain't got one of Toe, but I look at hundreds of roaches every day and how much difference can there be?

Great poem....but no cigar on the villanelle part.
RainbowGirl
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6 posted 10-15-1999 05:42 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

LJA: and no Rainbow in there..I'm pouting now...not to mention sulking..*g*

HUSG

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.

Watcher666
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7 posted 10-15-1999 08:18 PM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Witty and funny Loved it!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
JennyLee
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8 posted 10-15-1999 08:50 PM       View Profile for JennyLee   Email JennyLee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JennyLee

Very funny,I also agree with Watcher...very witty


Jenny
LngJhnAg
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9 posted 10-15-1999 09:09 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Thank you one and all -

'Deer - how did I miss on the villanelle? Five verses of three lines each, a sixth verse of four lines, and only two rhymes. Are there some restrictions on the meter?
Dr.Moose1
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10 posted 10-15-1999 09:56 PM       View Profile for Dr.Moose1   Email Dr.Moose1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dr.Moose1

LJA,
Out-standing , cudos , the total sum of erudite expression . Seriously , I loved it .
freespiritfem
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11 posted 10-15-1999 10:03 PM       View Profile for freespiritfem   Email freespiritfem   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for freespiritfem

LOL..enjoyed it greatly!!!
Very funny...

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Paula Diane S.
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12 posted 10-16-1999 12:23 AM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

We just did a class on villanelle Sailor. The last two lines in your quatrain are to be repeated through the poem. Nice work all the same but not a villanelle. I love reading the ummmm battle of wits? ego? etc. You gentlemen never fail to amaze me with your talents.
 
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