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Skyfyre
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0 posted 10-15-1999 03:04 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Skyfyre

You fabricate reality to suit your rigid taste --
Intelligence is atrophied, and genius goes to waste --
Neatly trapped in the confines
Of your narrow little minds,
You celebrate your travesty: a miracle disgraced.

Insatiably, you probe the darkest reaches of my mind,
For what I am does not embrace the patterns you've defined.
Content, for all the world to see,
To rot in your complacency:
A servant to the status quo, whose cancer made you blind.

Intent on placing limits on a thing that knows no bounds,
You cling to suppositions my unfettered soul confounds;
Imagination is a crime,
But even that will fade, in time:
You denigrate creative thought, pronouncing it unsound.

A ruthless order to your thoughts, painstakingly ingrained
To strip away the core of you, till nothing else remains;
It is a well-worn path you plod,
But I can see your way is flawed:
Oblivious, you labor on, and label me "insane."


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"Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus"
(Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.")

© Copyright 1999 Linda Anderson - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 10-15-1999 03:12 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

"and the insane shall inherit some world..."

Well done, Nocht!
Skyfyre
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2 posted 10-15-1999 03:19 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Thank you Sunshine, I always hoped I'd inherit something ...

[This message has been edited by Nochtdraco (edited 10-15-1999).]
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3 posted 10-15-1999 03:49 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

This is one of the best pieces of writing I've see on this site.....and the rhyme scheme is ideal for it. A huge well-done!
Skyfyre
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4 posted 10-15-1999 05:05 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

That's some compliment, Balladeer ... and coming from a poet of your caliber, doubly so. Thank you for the read and reply.

Nocht
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5 posted 10-15-1999 06:44 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Awesome, Nocht! Simply awesome!

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"Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats

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6 posted 10-15-1999 07:00 PM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Fantastic read! Liked this much!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
Dark Angel
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7 posted 10-15-1999 07:14 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Nochie, This is fantastic, enjoyed the read

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Skyfyre
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8 posted 10-15-1999 08:31 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Bow, with a flourish

caroline, Watcher, and Dark Angel ... thank you all so much for taking the time to reply. Your words of kindness are appreciated.

Nocht
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9 posted 10-15-1999 08:55 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

This is great, Nocht!!! I don't normally comment on rhyme schemes, but Balladeer's right... the rhyme scheme is perfect for this poem. Well done!
Skyfyre
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10 posted 10-15-1999 09:17 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre



Sorry if I seem to be trying to keep myself on the top, but it seems I can't see my responses until I've posted a reply myself! Wonder if it has anything to do with the screwed-up server..?

hoot_owl_rn
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11 posted 10-15-1999 11:24 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

an excellent piece of writing here
Denise
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12 posted 10-16-1999 06:50 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

I ditto all the above! Well done, Nocht!

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Denise
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13 posted 10-16-1999 07:19 PM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Systematic Decay

Nocht...I really love this one...it is a great description of the state of our society...not only was I labeled insane for haveing my own views, I was scapegoated for hateful graffiti, a death threat a girl got in her locker (She coincidentally is an enemy of mine) and even BOMB THREATS written on bathroom walls in my school, NONE of which I was guilty. The problem with modern society is that if something doesnt fit in with their idea of normal, or right, it must be destroyed.
I think a Metallica quote is suiting here: "You can do it your own way, If it's done just how we say."

Thanks Nocht for sharing this wonderful piece with us AND giving me a chance to vent about people in general.

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-
Skyfyre
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14 posted 10-16-1999 08:09 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Denise, I appreciate your response, as always. This piece is a bit out of character for me, at least since I got out of high school some #%^@ number of years ago ... (hee hee) I'm glad you liked it ...

Sys D, I know exactly how you feel ... when I was in high school, I was constantly judged by my appearance, the music I listened to, who I dated, and countless other irrelevant things ... rarely did someone take the time to get to know me before they passed judgement. I got my revenge, though --- much to everyone's surprise, I graduated with honors and was awarded a full scholarship to boot, and marched proudly at graduation with half my hair dyed blue!

Nocht
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15 posted 10-17-1999 06:43 PM       View Profile for Starith   Email Starith   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Starith

Ah how well I know this feeling. I have been called many things in mylife...insane is but one of them. But I would rather be insane than be sane and not have my poetry flow from within my veins. Beautifully done my friend.

Star

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We are only truly apperciated after we are no more!

Skyfyre
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16 posted 10-18-1999 10:20 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Good point Star, never looked at it that way before. Thanks for the reply!

Nocht
H. Arlequin
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17 posted 10-19-1999 12:54 AM       View Profile for H. Arlequin   Email H. Arlequin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit H. Arlequin's Home Page   View IP for H. Arlequin

Ha applauds!!!!
Severn
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18 posted 10-19-1999 01:49 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Ouch - wouldn't want to be the 'you' in this - if there is one! A fine fine piece of work, Nocht.
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19 posted 01-14-2002 10:36 AM       View Profile for Irish Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irish Rose

A ruthless order to your thoughts, painstakingly ingrained
                  To strip away the core of you, till nothing else remains;
                  It is a well-worn path you plod,
                  But I can see your way is flawed:
                  Oblivious, you labor on, and label me "insane."

these words alone will help me make it through the day, thank God for the archieves.

Kathleen--(Kay)
A true friend does not love you for who you are, but in spite of who you are." -- Caroline Tran

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