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It Ain't All About You, Baby

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Don Juan de Feu
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0 posted 10-15-1999 01:08 AM       View Profile for Don Juan de Feu   Email Don Juan de Feu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Don Juan de Feu


It Ain't All About You, Baby


He mused, preparing to explain,
"Are you not pleased with your surprise?"
At once, she started to complain
to whine up, loudly to the skies
her oft rediculous refrain
about all lovers and their lies...
to himself, he thought, just maybe
it ain't all about you, baby!

It had started out much better,
with them cooing at each other's
little tidbits nought would fetter,
about their passion's heated druthers.
Then he decided he would let her
have the say both dad's and mother's,
to himself, he thought, just maybe
this ain't all about you, baby!

Relationships sometimes wander
in paths unknown to either friend,
yet, they both the future squander,
before full bloom, a bitter end.
Tho his wish in love to bond her,
a return she could never send,
to himself, he thought, just maybe
that ain't all about you, baby!

Deciding to be on his way
to greener pastures he might find,
he allowed her a final say,
a parting chance to speak her mind.
Her sad response was to display
questions still, about ties that bind;
to himself, he thought, just maybe
life ain't all about you, baby!


--Don Juan de Feu
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Poems From the Goober Tree http://nathoo.wustl.edu/goober_tree.htm

[This message has been edited by Don Juan de Feu (edited 10-15-1999).]
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Severn
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1 posted 10-15-1999 02:00 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

I like this - it flows very well and I can see it set to music. Great work!
A Romantic Heart
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2 posted 10-15-1999 02:16 AM       View Profile for A Romantic Heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for A Romantic Heart

Great poem, for some reason, I thought of Frank Sinatra singing this! BABY!hehe!
hoot_owl_rn
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Welcome to passions
Martie
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4 posted 10-15-1999 01:53 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

I could see this as a song too, perhaps because of the refrain that is repeated. It read so true and natural like a good poem should. More please.
Don Juan de Feu
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thank you Severn, A Romantic Heart, hoot_owl_m and Martie for your generous
remarks!

DJdeFeu
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6 posted 10-16-1999 06:02 AM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Well done...liked this much!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
Denise
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7 posted 10-16-1999 02:59 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Another good one, Don!

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Denise
Don Juan de Feu
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8 posted 10-18-1999 12:36 PM       View Profile for Don Juan de Feu   Email Don Juan de Feu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Don Juan de Feu

ty ty ty watcher!
smoooooooches denise!!

DJ
caroline
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9 posted 10-18-1999 01:40 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Love the attitude in this piece Well done!

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"Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats

Pepper
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10 posted 10-18-1999 02:02 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

I too, appreciate the attitude of this work Dom.Very enjoyable read!

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
 
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