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The Surrender (from villanelle workshop)

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Skyfyre
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0 posted 10-14-1999 04:20 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Skyfyre

I dedicate this to all the folks who took the workshop with me, whose comments, suggestions, and praise made writing this worthwhile ... ya'll know who ya'll are!!


The Surrender

Seductive and sublime the tender night:
Caress of starlight holds me in its sway;
Enchanted moon bespells my mortal sight.

The noise of colour fades; this silvered light
Becalms the clash of hues to soothing gray:
Seductive and sublime, the tender night.

Fair Luna, in her slow and graceful flight,
Holds fast my gaze -- I cannot look away --
Enchanted moon bespells my mortal sight.

In shadow robed, I mouth the darkling rite,
Renouncing evermore the bane of day:
Seductive and sublime the tender night.

Celestial queen, her countenance alight
With royal air, commanding me to stay:
Enchanted moon bespells my mortal sight.

This summons, I am powerless to fight:
It beckons to my soul; I must obey.
Seductive and sublime the tender night;
Enchanted moon bespells my mortal sight.




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"Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus"
(Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.")

© Copyright 1999 Linda Anderson - All Rights Reserved
Pepper
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1 posted 10-14-1999 04:48 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Enchanting Nocht. I love the visual of this piece.

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
Michael
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2 posted 10-14-1999 05:27 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Nocht,
I was really impressed with your final product, here. Truly and exquisite villanelle, (Like I'm really a judge), but in my eyes and knowing just what goes into these things now, a wonderful job.

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Michael Anderson

When God puts a tear in your eye,
He puts a rainbow in your heart.



Denise
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3 posted 10-14-1999 08:26 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This was spellbinding, simply beautiful! Boy, you folks all did so well with these! Guess y'all did your homework!

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Denise
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As I already told you, this is wonderful. You did a wonderful job in class, I give you an A+...too bad I'm not the teacher, but I think Nan will agree
Severn
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Fantastic - love the imagery, Nocht.
Skyfyre
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6 posted 10-15-1999 04:57 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Such praise from such poets is gratifying!

Michael, I was beginning to wonder whether my little joke in the workshop had ticked you off ... LOL ... I'm glad to see that it didn't! As I wrote in the dedication, I appreciated your suggestions; though I didn't take them, they showed that you were taking an interest in my writing, and I appreciate that.

hoot, you are a gem ... thank you so much for your input as well, and your subsequent praise ... it is always cherished, even if I forget to mention it.

Severn, dsnyder and Pepper ... thanks for your replies ... I hope that this and the other great villanelles we produced for your enjoyment will entice you to join us in the next workshop (I think its going to be pantoums). The more the merrier!

Nocht
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7 posted 10-15-1999 07:23 PM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Fabulous read.Enjoyed it much!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
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