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Martie
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I must put my house in order.
Hand you place yourself there,
leg slope gently to the ankle please,
donít look too closely eyes,
this all takes time.

God, Iím tired of this same desolate day,
Iím looking for a way to mend the cracks
from this inner tremor.
See me in the newness of this morning star?

You say I look at you with the same eyes.
Do you know that Iíve polished for years
to get that shine?
There is dust under the rug,
I will write my name in it
will you know who I am then?

I must matriculate into my years,
slowly now,
the other side of youth is imminent,
everyone must graduate.

I must put my house in order,
there are rooms that need airing.
Lips you turn softly now,
lashes, dim the lights please,
this all takes time.

© Copyright 1999 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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This one needs a boost to the top, it got lost in the shuffle and deserves to be read
Martie
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2 posted 10-15-1999 01:39 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Thanks Hootowl. I guess I should have given it a more interesting name. Who wants to read about housecleaning?
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3 posted 10-15-1999 02:59 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Wow! Thank you, hoot. I missed it altogether. This has wonderful lines to it. "Do you know that I've polished for years to get that shine?" There is really a lot of meaning in this poem. It needs to be read more than once. Wonderful job, Martie.
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4 posted 10-15-1999 08:06 PM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Liked this much! Well done!

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Pure excellence Martie! This likes me much!

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"Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats

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I know what you mean
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